What I Would Do

July 8, 2012
By Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.


I see him up there,





Legs dangling from the edge,





Trying to look like he has a bad boy edge—





But not today.







Today there are tears streaming down his beautiful face.





They come down like a waterfall,





As if it were a race.





Laced with sadness,





They hit me,





Like they were drops of rain.





I shout up to him,"Come down, I know your pain."






I run up the fire escape,





As if my feet caught on flame.





I'd sit there on that roof top with him as we confess,"We're lame."






I take his hand,





So warm in mine,





And take him some place else.





"Everything will be fine."





I tell him,





As I place my hand on his scars,





The ones on his back,





And the ones his dad gave him with his cigars.






"Rose and I had a fight, I can't smile like some do."





"Yes you can." I take his hand "Because I love you."






This is what I would do,





If I could stop you,





On that one horrid day.





You've moved on and away from me,





When you passed away.





I miss you so much,





My dearest friend,





In every single way.



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on May. 29 2014 at 2:04 am
Madison_E BRONZE, Brownstown, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.

that was awesome, one of my favorites (:

on Apr. 25 2014 at 12:34 pm
WOWriting SILVER, Broadstairs, Other
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Really sweet and I love the simplicity of it, but maybe the rhyming's a bit strained at times. Still really beautiful tho, hope I don't offend :)

on Oct. 2 2013 at 2:36 pm
littlepiepschuim PLATINUM, Las Vegas, Nevada
22 articles 2 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You must stay drunk on writing so reality cannot destroy you.”
― Ray Bradbury
“There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.”
― Maya Angelou
“There is nothing to writing. All you do is sit down at a typewriter and bleed.”
― Ernest Hemingway

This reminds me so much of my big brother, I think this is beautiful and I absolutely love it.

Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 27 2012 at 9:15 pm
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

Thanks a bunch, it really was tragic. I wouldn't say flawless though :P

on Jul. 27 2012 at 7:09 pm
Allicat001 SILVER, Waukesha, Wisconsin
6 articles 0 photos 171 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is not someone you can live with, love is someone you can't live without."

"Always stand up for what's right even if that means you're standing alone."

So sad, and so tragic, yet so moving and beautiful, flawless job.

Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 26 2012 at 10:36 pm
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

Thank you, you are beautiful, ^-^

on Jul. 26 2012 at 10:29 pm
LETangelzFall BRONZE, Bonnie Terre, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Trust is like paper once its crumpled, its never perfect again...

that was beaughtiful

Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 25 2012 at 7:26 pm
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

Thanks :) I try really hard when it comes to writing. 

on Jul. 25 2012 at 3:42 pm
caitiekate GOLD, Hopkinton, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want, not what you can." --Me

glad i could be of help, but again, great poem!!

Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 25 2012 at 12:41 pm
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

Thank you for your feed back, and yes my imagery tends to be very suddle, I will try and work on it in the future.

on Jul. 25 2012 at 11:58 am
caitiekate GOLD, Hopkinton, New Hampshire
16 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want, not what you can." --Me

I agree...very sad! Good job with the rhyme scheme...it worked well with the poem. It was short and sweet to capture that moment. However a little more imagery can never hurt because I was a little confused the first time I read it...I really had to pay attention and read it slow in order to get every detail since they weren't emphasized. But again, a really nice piece! (My school work always end up being good poems too!) haha

on Jul. 24 2012 at 11:56 pm
zoeisdyingtolive BRONZE, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
she was a decaying flower that once bloomed beautiful.

Anytime c:

Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 24 2012 at 11:50 pm
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

Thank you, I know he is still watching over my friends and I from a better place.

Honour SILVER said...
on Jul. 24 2012 at 11:35 pm
Honour SILVER, New London, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
Greater love has no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends. ~John 15:13

"Give me liberty or give me death!" ~Patrick Henry

Be brave and steadfast; have no fear or dread of them, for it is the Lord, your God, who marches with you; he will never fail you or forsake you. ~ Deuteronomy 31:6

"I prefer dangerous freedom over peaceful slavery" ~ Thomas Jefferson

Wow, this is sad. :'(  I hope your friend is in a better place now, and I give my condolences to you and all hurt by his death.  It's a well writen peice though, good job Triumph.

Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 24 2012 at 7:51 pm
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

I know, it was an assignment at first, but I took it and I ran with it. The assignment was what would you do if you could turn back time and do over one thing, and I picked saving my friend. 

Hannabug GOLD said...
on Jul. 24 2012 at 7:47 pm
Hannabug GOLD, Winona, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't only practice your art, but force your way into its secrets, for it and knowledge can raise men to the Divine." Ludwig van Beethoven

This is so sad and sweet at the same time

 


Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 24 2012 at 7:37 pm
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

Thank you so much :) 

on Jul. 24 2012 at 7:31 pm
zoeisdyingtolive BRONZE, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
she was a decaying flower that once bloomed beautiful.

This is beautiful.

Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 24 2012 at 7:18 pm
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

Thank you immense amounts! I will never stop writing and I will definitely check out your work. I'm sure he would've loved to read that comment!

on Jul. 24 2012 at 1:20 pm
CelestaCuffrig GOLD, Loveland, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"Inspiration is only as enlightening as you are open to it."

You know those tingly feelings you get when you read something genius? I just got those. This is a lovely mixture of poetry, love story, and loss. Beautiful! Check out my work, pretty please? AND KEEP WRITING.




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