What I Would Do

July 8, 2012
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I see him up there,

Legs dangling from the edge,

Trying to look like he has a bad boy edge—

But not today.

Today there are tears streaming down his beautiful face.

They come down like a waterfall,

As if it were a race.

Laced with sadness,

They hit me,

Like they were drops of rain.

I shout up to him,"Come down, I know your pain."

I run up the fire escape,

As if my feet caught on flame.

I'd sit there on that roof top with him as we confess,"We're lame."

I take his hand,

So warm in mine,

And take him some place else.

"Everything will be fine."

I tell him,

As I place my hand on his scars,

The ones on his back,

And the ones his dad gave him with his cigars.

"Rose and I had a fight, I can't smile like some do."

"Yes you can." I take his hand "Because I love you."

This is what I would do,

If I could stop you,

On that one horrid day.

You've moved on and away from me,

When you passed away.

I miss you so much,

My dearest friend,

In every single way.

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Madison_E said...
May 29, 2014 at 2:04 am
that was awesome, one of my favorites (:
WOWriting said...
Apr. 25, 2014 at 12:34 pm
Really sweet and I love the simplicity of it, but maybe the rhyming's a bit strained at times. Still really beautiful tho, hope I don't offend :)
IndigoAngel said...
Oct. 2, 2013 at 2:36 pm
This reminds me so much of my big brother, I think this is beautiful and I absolutely love it.
Allicat001 said...
Jul. 27, 2012 at 7:09 pm
So sad, and so tragic, yet so moving and beautiful, flawless job.
Triumph replied...
Jul. 27, 2012 at 9:15 pm
Thanks a bunch, it really was tragic. I wouldn't say flawless though :P
LETangelzFall said...
Jul. 26, 2012 at 10:29 pm
that was beaughtiful
Triumph replied...
Jul. 26, 2012 at 10:36 pm
Thank you, you are beautiful, ^-^
caitiekate said...
Jul. 25, 2012 at 11:58 am
I agree...very sad! Good job with the rhyme scheme...it worked well with the poem. It was short and sweet to capture that moment. However a little more imagery can never hurt because I was a little confused the first time I read it...I really had to pay attention and read it slow in order to get every detail since they weren't emphasized. But again, a really nice piece! (My school work always end up being good poems too!) haha
Triumph replied...
Jul. 25, 2012 at 12:41 pm
Thank you for your feed back, and yes my imagery tends to be very suddle, I will try and work on it in the future.
caitiekate replied...
Jul. 25, 2012 at 3:42 pm
glad i could be of help, but again, great poem!!
Triumph replied...
Jul. 25, 2012 at 7:26 pm
Thanks :) I try really hard when it comes to writing. 
Proud_To_Be_An_American said...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 11:35 pm
Wow, this is sad. :'(  I hope your friend is in a better place now, and I give my condolences to you and all hurt by his death.  It's a well writen peice though, good job Triumph.
Triumph replied...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 11:50 pm
Thank you, I know he is still watching over my friends and I from a better place.
Hannabug said...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 7:47 pm

This is so sad and sweet at the same time


Triumph replied...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 7:51 pm
I know, it was an assignment at first, but I took it and I ran with it. The assignment was what would you do if you could turn back time and do over one thing, and I picked saving my friend. 
zoeisdyingtolive said...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 7:31 pm
This is beautiful.
Triumph replied...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 7:37 pm
Thank you so much :) 
zoeisdyingtolive replied...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 11:56 pm
Anytime c:
CelestaCuffrig said...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 1:20 pm
You know those tingly feelings you get when you read something genius? I just got those. This is a lovely mixture of poetry, love story, and loss. Beautiful! Check out my work, pretty please? AND KEEP WRITING.
Triumph replied...
Jul. 24, 2012 at 7:18 pm
Thank you immense amounts! I will never stop writing and I will definitely check out your work. I'm sure he would've loved to read that comment!
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