heart attack

April 1, 2012
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I told you to be careful as you walked on the floor boards of my heart.
I told you they were weak, and easy to fall apart.
You did not listen and it only took a stomp or two,
But before I knew it everything fell through.

When you wanted me I told you it was a mistake,
But my heart was so vulnerable and easy to take.
Now I know to never let myself be so weak.
I know it will be hard next time we have to speak.

I feel so stupid for even giving you a chance,
And letting you spin me around in your little dance.
Now I just feel sick.
I don’t understand why you did this.

I hate feeling bad for myself,
So feeling like this is personal hell.
I really want to hurt you back,
But being near you might give me a heart attack.

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snowleopard100 said...
Apr. 14, 2012 at 1:52 pm
Okay so I really loved the beginning of the poem. The dea of walking on somebody's heart was soo unique and intriguing that I was entranced. But as it went on the imagery became more literal and less exciting. At certain points it was even a little cliched. But overall nice work and keep it up!!!!
eternal_sunshine said...
Apr. 11, 2012 at 6:35 pm
This was also extremely relatable for me. I think a lot of people have that one person who they completely regret letting into their lives. This reminded me of mine. It was your personal story, but yet I related to it. Your rhymes flowed well and it was easy to read. Lovely poem.
dark_armor1This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 10, 2012 at 8:42 pm
i like it! its very similar to one of my poems A Map to Darkness. i like how ur not afraid to admit u were wrong. i also like how ur brutally honest with th fact u wish u could hurt him back. i think we all go through those moments. dont worry u will find someone better !
gb12197 replied...
Apr. 10, 2012 at 11:59 pm
thanks for the feedback, i am really glad you liked it.
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