Phoenix of the Sea

I believe you're talking about waves, or you wouldn't have that picture. Waves are a beautiful thing, almost alive due to their overwhelming sound, smell, and even taste. Your poem seems to lack any sensory detail, making it difficult for me to connect with it. If you want to draw the reader in, first you must speak to them, if that makes sense. Furthermore, don't let the rhyme scheme hinder your creativity. Some of the best poetry doesn't have rhyme or rhythm. Let the words flow... (more »)