Smokey eyes

February 17, 2012
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The Smoke rises
and looks upon me.
The air is too humid
too hard to breath

Down to Earth
but yet so free.
Goes with the wind
but stays close to me.

You are always there
an echo to my cries.
Though you always make me smile
With your gray smokey eyes





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OceanWaters said...
Jul. 21, 2012 at 9:23 pm
I think it is a great poem but you neeed to define more who it is about because i cant decide weather it is about a girlfriend, girl you like, or a best friend. also try writing longer poems it helps you be more descreptive. Also focus in health class you do learn stuff in health.
 
nakubara This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 12, 2012 at 3:36 pm
THIS IS AWESOME! Keep it up! School comes first though! :)
 
SilentChaos said...
Jul. 5, 2012 at 5:23 pm
This is really awesome. You should keep writing :)
 
albinotiger replied...
Jul. 10, 2012 at 5:49 pm
thank you, i will. thanks for commenting!
 
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