Rain in the West

August 23, 2011
By ChocoMint SILVER, Bloomington, Indiana
ChocoMint SILVER, Bloomington, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is like swallowing hot chocolate before it has cooled off. It takes you by surprise at first, but keeps you warm for a long time." - Anonymous

"Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss and ends with a tear." - Anonymous


Rain hear my cry
Rain grace my land
Rain reach my ears
Rain touch my hand

Rain loose your wrath
Rain open your door
Rain drench my back
Rain let it pour

Rain cease this ache
Rain quench my thirst
Rain end this sorrow
Rain stop this curse

Rain I hear you
Rain come close
Rain overhead
Rain like a ghost

Rain in the evening
Rain in my sight
Rain in the morning
Rain in the night

Rain never stopping
Rain always pounding
Rain beating hard
Rain so surrounding

Rain on the fields
Rain on the steer
Rain at my doorstep
Rain finally here


The author's comments:
I love to write about nature and how it affects people. Tell me how well it flows and if you can feel the emotion in it.

Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 8 comments.


on Oct. 4 2011 at 9:47 pm
JoyfulCheers SILVER, St. Croix Falls, Wisconsin
5 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
smile at the world and it will smile back

you are a great writer and your words just flow rite together. Keep up the work, you have alot of great talent!

on Sep. 11 2011 at 9:25 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
10 articles 0 photos 145 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

I love how the rhythm is so perfect that it sort of sounds like the rhythmic patter of rain, though you might not have realized it. :) awesome job! I absolutely love nature too, and every one of my poems are based on nature. keep writing!

on Sep. 10 2011 at 9:48 pm
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 578 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

This is amazing! I love the repitition and the rhythm to this poem. Well done! :)

on Sep. 9 2011 at 3:14 pm
ChocoMint SILVER, Bloomington, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is like swallowing hot chocolate before it has cooled off. It takes you by surprise at first, but keeps you warm for a long time." - Anonymous

"Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss and ends with a tear." - Anonymous

Thanks a lot.  I love to write and it's a wonderful feeling to know other people like your hard work.  <><  =+)

on Sep. 9 2011 at 10:13 am
Saphirra BRONZE, Auburn, Pennsylvania
4 articles 13 photos 109 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Falling is just like flying except there’s a more permanent destination.” -Some person on Tumblr

You are a very talented writer! I read your other work too, and all of them are amazing!  Keep up the amazing work! :D

Steph0804 GOLD said...
on Sep. 5 2011 at 7:15 am
Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
12 articles 4 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Explaining a joke is like dissecting a frog: you understand it better, but the frog dies in the process." -E.B. White

This flowed really well! You should keep writing poetry!

on Sep. 4 2011 at 7:40 pm
ChocoMint SILVER, Bloomington, Indiana
7 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love is like swallowing hot chocolate before it has cooled off. It takes you by surprise at first, but keeps you warm for a long time." - Anonymous

"Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss and ends with a tear." - Anonymous

Thank you so much.  =+)

Skylight said...
on Sep. 3 2011 at 10:04 am
Skylight, Hurst, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 47 comments
Wow, this is amazing! I really like how well it flowed, and I can feel the emotion in it! Never stop writing, ChocoMint. :)




MacMillan Books

Aspiring Writer? Take Our Online Course!