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Two Moons with my Father

August 15, 2011
By Krisscross BRONZE, North Andover, Massachusetts
Krisscross BRONZE, North Andover, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Live, Laugh, Learn, and Love and Happiness will embrace you" -Unknown


Sitting by the bay
keeping time with the sway
of warm, soft waves.
My feet dangle over the dock
my ears listen to the tick-tock
of his water-proof watch.

We sit there in silence.
He glances at his daughter
as I watch the moon rise
over water.

I notice suddenly, two moons.
One an image of the first,
not quite imitating its creator,
Smiling in reverse.



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dancestar GOLD said...
on Aug. 17 2011 at 11:56 am
dancestar GOLD, Westford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
BE WHO YOU WANNA BE NOT WHO OTHERS WANNA SEE!!!

that was a very sweet poem, at the end, i was like awww...it was also very well written...good job! and plz check out my work like "Dear Dad" and "Girl Next Door" I think you'll like it : )

on Aug. 17 2011 at 8:21 am
BeLoveToday PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.
-Nelson Mandela

"Leave your fear of love behind,
let your dreaming be your guide.
If you seek, than you shall find."
-"Dreamer," by Elizaveta

This is a lovely poem with simple but resounding imagery. Your choice of rhyme helps the language flow, and sounds pleasing to the ear. I can easily picture this moment, and you do well at presenting the important details, without ornate and flowery language. Also, I love the last line; it's very clever and makes you think. "Smiling in reverse," could mean a few different things, but I like that you leave it up to interpretation. Very nice piece, thanks for sharing!