Unconditional Love

May 22, 2011
By ThisGirlWillMakeMistakes PLATINUM, Raymore, Missouri
ThisGirlWillMakeMistakes PLATINUM, Raymore, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over,
Smile because it happened."


-Dr. Suess


You are leaving us and your walking away,
I wish for a moment that you wished to stay,
I see little tears sliding down your cheek,
The look in your eyes is now very bleak.

People search their whole life for what we had,
Then you threw it away and made me sad,
I know you hate me and its easy to understand,
But I still wish I could be the one to hold your hand.

When did this go from so right to so wrong?
When did our love turn into a break-up song?
When did your smile turn into a frown?
How come I never looked up and always kept my head down?

I shouldn't have hurt you as much as I did,
How come I acted like an adult instead of a kid?
I'm gonna miss you more than you will ever know,
In my heart the emptiness will just grow and grow.

Deep down in my heart I'll never stop loving you,
And honestly I really don't want to,
I wanna remember those beautiful moments when,
You smiled at me with your amazing little grin.

I wish we could still be close friends,
I think that we should just make amends,
I think we should forget about the past,
This is the present and its not going to last.

I'm just standing here my heart is dying,
You can't seem to notice these tears I'm crying,
I'm the only one left, everyone else walked away,
I'm the only one that's standing here at the end of the day.

Why can't you see just how much I care?
How come you keep giving me that vicious glare?
You need to understand what I say is true,
You need to understand that I honestly want you.

Why do you have the need to leave?
Why are you leaving my heart to grieve?
Won't you just give me one last hug?
Won't you stop leaving your shoulders in a shrug?

No matter what happens however far you go,
In your heart you should always know,
What I feel for you is an unconditional love,
Compared to the rest I'll love you far and above.


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KatB14 SILVER said...
on Jul. 7 2011 at 9:08 pm
KatB14 SILVER, Chesapeake, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"You don't always get the waterfall short-cut in Mario-Kart. That's life."-I.P.

"Doubt thou the stars are fire; Doubt that the sun doth move; Doubt truth to be a liar; But never doubt I love." -Hamlet

I like the way youre conveying the subject, and I can easily understand your emotions. Some of the lines could probably be rephrased to flow better, just watch your syllables.

this is in response to you commenting on my eating disorder poem, by the way. I'll look at more of yours.


on Jun. 21 2011 at 2:15 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

I just posted a poem called "Stuck and Unstuck Love" in the forum. I'm impatient, so I didn't want to have to wait! Thanks for helping this newcomer out, by the way. Very hospitable! (:

on Jun. 21 2011 at 12:39 pm
ThisGirlWillMakeMistakes PLATINUM, Raymore, Missouri
23 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over,
Smile because it happened."


-Dr. Suess

Thank you, i really appreciate you commenting on my poems, it makes me so happy(: i will make sure to check it out!

on Jun. 21 2011 at 12:38 pm
ThisGirlWillMakeMistakes PLATINUM, Raymore, Missouri
23 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over,
Smile because it happened."


-Dr. Suess

If you want some feedback sooner you can post them in "forums" and it doesnt have to be approved people can look at it right away...(: jusss' sayin. GOOD LUCK!

on Jun. 21 2011 at 10:23 am
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

Yes. I just sent some of my poetry in. I'm excited to see them posted! I hope it doesn't take too long!

on Jun. 21 2011 at 8:55 am
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

I love the point of this poem- it is SO relatable. LOOOOOve the second to last stanza, its definitely my favorite. I have a poem about this same kinda thing called "I am Strong" if you wouldn't mind checking it out :D Keep writing!

on Jun. 21 2011 at 12:36 am
ThisGirlWillMakeMistakes PLATINUM, Raymore, Missouri
23 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over,
Smile because it happened."


-Dr. Suess

Thank You Very Much(:

P.S.- I noticed that you just joined, if you posted some poems be patient with the sight it might take a while for them to publish your poems but I'm sure that the wait will be worth it and thanks so much for the feedback!


on Jun. 21 2011 at 12:22 am
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

This is a really great poem. I could feel your emotion as I read it and that means you wrote it well!!!


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