Our Love Game

May 15, 2011
You kissed me once; Hugged me twice,
Now it's time to roll the dice,
I'm not listening to anybody else advice,
It is time to go home or play nice.

Even numbers its my way,
Odd numbers its your day,
I don't really care how you play,
But this is all I got to say;

The numbers in this game are 1,2,3,4,5,6
This game involves me and no other chicks,
Don't try any of your boyish tricks,
Let's not make this a confusing matrix.

If I win were gonna have some fun,
Were gonna laugh and lay in the Sun,
Who knows when were gonna be done,
In the end I hope I'm your number one.

If you win I hope you choose right,
I hope your plans go on through the night,
I hope what we do will be outta sight,
No matter what happens I hope we stay tight.

If you haven't guessed this is a love game,
All you gotta do is remember my name,
Don't worry about things staying the same,
Its gonna be hard to keep us tame.

Just show me a little respect,
Try to understand my dialect,
Sometimes I'm afraid and suspect,
I'll give you my heart and you'll reject.

Let's take a chance on this game of love,
Let's treat it like a gift from above,
Let neither of us try to push or shove,
Our moments will be something to dream of.

When we're together I'll always smile,
I hope we last a very long while,
I hope between us there will be no denial,
If you say no my heart will be vile.

So please babe just take a chance,
Our love will be a great story of romance,
You always make my heart want to dance,
Day by day my smile would enhance.

Its okay to take my hand,
Together we will take our stand,
Our promise will be tight as a band,
Everybody will see and they'll understand.

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TheKountess said...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 8:20 pm

I just love this. I agree with GanstaEyes that a few places were a little forced, but either way it was just great. :) A lot of your writing reminds me of my own. Keep writing, I can tell your passionate about it.

PS - I totally heard this as a song in my head. :)

GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 21, 2011 at 9:04 am
I like this one a lot, the first verse pulls the reader in. If was to give you one tiny piece of constructive criticism, I'd say be careful about rhyming. Don't get me wrong, you're very good at it, and it flows pretty well overall, but sometimes the lines are a little forced so they fit the rhyme scheme. Thats just my opinion tho :P Probably because I kinda suck at rhyming... Other than that, great job! :D I love the message behind it, its super relatable :)
ThisGirlWillMakeMistakes replied...
Jun. 21, 2011 at 12:34 pm
Thank you.(: and thanks for the criticism i really appreciate it!
GangstaEyes This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 10:48 am
Sure. :) I'm always really hesitant to give criticism because I worry the writer will get mad... But I've learned that when people give ME criticism, it can really help. So sorry if I came aross rude or anything. :P
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