The War at Home MAG

June 4, 2008
By Paul Marinos, Akron, OH

With the rotting stench
And the corpses he’s seeing,
How could anyone be asked
To kill another human being?

Constant regret
For what he’s done,
The war for him is over
But he still hasn’t won.

Haunting questions
Come from the dead.
The universe is exploding and imploding
All in his head.

Returning to his homeland
With emotional distress,
He’s met with indifference and anger.
He only did his best.

With not so much
As a “job well done,”
Or even a “thank you,”
Or “I’m proud of you, son.”


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on Mar. 13 2017 at 10:37 pm
eshaansoman SILVER, Hillsborough, New Jersey
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What a piece! Gives a new meaning to war and the psychological effects is has on people

on Dec. 24 2016 at 5:07 am
skematt PLATINUM, Shanghai, Other
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Beautiful poem! I love it.

on Nov. 16 2014 at 8:32 am
ShadowBlossom ELITE, Boca Raton, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Memento Mori- It means that nothing lasts forever, no one is immortal, sooner or later you will die and things will come to an end. It also helps you realize that while you are living you should do the most with your life, live life to the fullest.

Your ballad is amazing, I fell in love with it one just the first few lines yet it saddened me.  I know how true it can be with family and friends who shared the same fate as the character or person you wrote about.  To be able to write and express such emotion and truth is truly incredible.  We send out our sons and daughters for what we think is the greater good, something to be proud of but when we see what comes of it, the damage done and the total toll of it all, we don't really care for its reason.  We become angry, hateful, to our sons and daughters that we sent out and practically forced to leave home and loving arms, at the wars and battles that they played a part in, those that they fought, and truthfully at ourselves.  The last reason, few ever admit or deny for the continuation of their lives and it's heartbreaking!  Our soldiers risked their lives and died for what they were told and what the thought was right.  That alone should be apreciated and we should be proud of them for that and that alone, that they never gave up and fought on.  We should be there for them to pick up the pieces when they come home or are shipped back like a package.  They did their job, when will we learn to do ours?

on Nov. 1 2013 at 8:42 pm
Kat_Poetry BRONZE, Neenah, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"But without the dark, we would never see the stars"

I think that you are a really good writer and the idea of this peice is very good. If i could give a word of advice, I would say that the overall poem would flow better if all the lines were all a similar length. The first two sanzas were fenominal, but then the last three didnt have the same flow. Once again, I loved this peice, just a few technical things! (;

on Jan. 11 2012 at 3:46 pm
ShadowOfDarkness PLATINUM, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
Coute que coute(Cost What It May)

Hey man. that was awesome, me and u got alot in common.

eliana924 GOLD said...
on Dec. 18 2011 at 9:34 pm
eliana924 GOLD, New York, New York
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What a chilling last line! Great job :)

on Oct. 2 2011 at 4:53 am
emmatheballerina GOLD, Tacoma, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"It is not in our greatest glory in never falling, but in rising everytime we fall"
"I use to want the words "she tried" on my tombstone, now I want "she did it"

That was fabulous! keep it up!

on Sep. 23 2011 at 3:45 pm
iluvrockandroll2 PLATINUM, Tinton Falls, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Some women choose to follow men, and some women choose to follow their dreams. If you're wondering which way to go, remember that your career will never wake up and tell you that it doesn't love you anymore."
— Lady Gaga

wow. dude, keep writing and dont stop.

on Jun. 27 2011 at 7:53 pm
StrangeJade PLATINUM, Relative Obscurity, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is so beautiful that death has fallen in love with it." - Life of Pi

Wow. That was really good! It kind of reminds me of the book I'm writing.

"The war for him is over but he still hasn't won..." That was the best line. Keep writing!!


on Jun. 22 2011 at 5:23 pm
FallenAngel1 SILVER, Chula Vista, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Good Night, good night! Parting is such sweet sorrow, that i shall say good night till it be morrow."-Romeo and Juliet act II scene II, William Shakespeare
"What's In a name? That which we call a rosse by any other name would smell as sweet."-Romeo

Please do not stop writing.

on Jun. 6 2011 at 10:12 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

That is exactly what I got from it!!!!! Thank you leaf44!!!! :)

on Jun. 6 2011 at 10:07 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

Yes that is exactly what I got from it. 

on Jun. 5 2011 at 4:24 pm
leaf44 PLATINUM, Rehoboth, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Truth is stranger than fiction because fiction has to make sense."
"Be careful, or you'll end up in my novel."

I agree with JoPepper, i don't think the authors saying we should stop defending ourselves, i think its more about the bad things (for lack of better word) that come with war- mainly death and suffering and how it can effect the soldiers afterwards when they come home

on Jun. 5 2011 at 3:36 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

I love the poem too!!!! :D

on Jun. 5 2011 at 3:34 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

Okaaay yes it was a very bad thing and the person who cause that needed to die.... but chill out the person who wrote this wasn't saying we should stop defending ourselves I don't think.  No offense.  :l

on Jun. 5 2011 at 3:28 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

Beautiful I really liked it to bad it's true.:'(  never stop writing!!!!!:)

on Apr. 5 2011 at 12:48 pm
WaterGirl23 BRONZE, Nutley, New Jersey
4 articles 5 photos 47 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some are born great, some achieve greatness, and some have greatness thrust upon them." -William Shakespeare

beautifully written! i love it! keep on writing :)

on Mar. 31 2011 at 12:29 pm
LeonorEmmalyn, Arroyo Hondo, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"I hold with those who favor fire."
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, and I-- I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

This is really great. Keep it up!

on Feb. 14 2011 at 8:32 pm
mandaloreP GOLD, Forked River, New Jersey
15 articles 4 photos 21 comments
just absoulutly amazing, great job with eveerything.

lion2 said...
on Dec. 9 2010 at 2:19 pm

me toooooo

 



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