You Can't See

May 10, 2010
By maybeshannon DIAMOND, Keller, Texas
maybeshannon DIAMOND, Keller, Texas
53 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you just can't recreate stupid." --jacobbbb
"i just saw the picture of epicness... M&M guitar!!" --kevin brown
"our love is so dumbbb" --sean kingston
"if perfect's what you're searchin' for then just stay the same" --bruno mars <333 =]


Take a look. Just one. Take one long look at me.
Open your eyes. Just a little. Tell me what you see.
My smile, sure. My polo shirt. My curly blonde hair that falls
Far down past my shoulders. You think you've seen it all.
If you look a little harder, you'd be able to tell me smile's
Calculated and controlled, when it should be carefree and wide.
Now, boy, look up at my eyes. They're hazel, by the way.
You wouldn't know 'cause you never look, but they don't shine as much these days.
Take a breath. Just one. Listen… maybe you can hear
The ripping of my heart, or the drip-drops of my tears.


The author's comments:
honestly sometimes i think boys [and boyfriends] are just plain BLIND!

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on Jun. 8 2010 at 8:27 pm
inspire.identity. PLATINUM, Ajax, Other
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Thanks soo much! and not yet - but i will deifnately have a look ! :) 

on Jun. 7 2010 at 10:36 pm
maybeshannon DIAMOND, Keller, Texas
53 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"you just can't recreate stupid." --jacobbbb
"i just saw the picture of epicness... M&M guitar!!" --kevin brown
"our love is so dumbbb" --sean kingston
"if perfect's what you're searchin' for then just stay the same" --bruno mars <333 =]

haha thanks =] did you see amy of my others?? most of em are about the same guy actually just different times of the relationshipp. and ohkayy will do ;]

on Jun. 7 2010 at 10:06 pm
inspire.identity. PLATINUM, Ajax, Other
23 articles 8 photos 98 comments
I love this so much! It's absolutely incredible. You have talent !  I would love if you had a look at some of my work ; thanks ! :D 

on Jun. 4 2010 at 8:16 am
LeilaniLives PLATINUM, Fort Wayne, Indiana
42 articles 11 photos 128 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They say 'Life's two steps forward and one step back' - But what if I tripped and fell down the whole flight of stairs?"

Beautiful. It was misleading throughout the story, maybe you should have foreshadowed a little, show the reader what we were looking into... other than that, job well done.

Jessne said...
on Jun. 3 2010 at 6:51 pm
O my god. I absolutly L-O-V-E this poem! It really moves me! Great job!


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