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it was raining hard
that late december
though long ago
we still remember...

she closed her eyes
she started to weep
he had failed to love her
she had loved too deep
she ran to him
he turned away
he had chosen to leave
she begged him to stay
she had told him the truth
he fed her dark lies
his love only imagined
her love simply denied
when she opened her eyes
she closed up her heart
then she too hold of his
and she ripped it apart

you may think it violent
extreamly so
but you werent there
youll never know



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Fungi-Portal said...
Jul. 3, 2010 at 10:39 pm:

wow, this is great :)

I really like this. it flows really nicely and it's very emotive. kudos.

 
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Allykattz said...
Jun. 13, 2010 at 8:38 am:
very emotional piece, its almost like your telling the end of a story but leaving out the middle and it makes it full of mystery. love it!
 
JustAlice. replied...
Jun. 13, 2010 at 2:21 pm :
thanks! i like to leave out thing to make room for imagination. i submitted two more about a week ago they should be through any day now.
 
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shes_a_tee_ex_babeh_899 said...
Jun. 6, 2010 at 2:15 pm:
"when she opened her eyes
she closed up her heart" i liked those lines! that was a really really good poem
 
JustAlice. replied...
Jun. 6, 2010 at 3:17 pm :
thank you i was inspired by a book. im glad you like it!
 
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Blondiee said...
Apr. 5, 2010 at 7:30 pm:
wow. This is so amazing. I just found it in my favorites. I love it. and ignore <3juxxmeeh<3 she's my friend haha. 
 
JustAlice? replied...
Apr. 6, 2010 at 1:41 pm :
thank you very much. yeah i didnt really understand <3JuxxMeeh<3
 
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<3JuxxMeeh<3 said...
Jan. 15, 2010 at 9:13 am:
la dee da da da
 
JustAlice? replied...
Jan. 15, 2010 at 4:26 pm :
thanks.i think?
 
MadAsAHatter;] replied...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 6:13 pm :
I remember reading this before. I never told you how it made me felt. I love it, I think it reminds me a lot of what happened, but no one was there so they'll never know...
 
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