Down Came the Walls

With feet like ice
I quake with feeling.
With squeaks like mice,
I shudder.

Sobs like fire.
A lone tear falls.
Breaking heart.
Down come the walls.

Though my voice fails,
I try to speak.
With hallow wails,
I'm breaking.

Sobs like fire.
A lone tear falls.
Breaking heart.
Down come the walls.

My knees are weak.
I cannot stand.
With tear streaked cheek,
I fall.

Sobs like fire.
A lone tear falls.
Breaking heart.
Down come the walls.

Falling apart,
I spill my sorrow.
Pour out my heart.
I broke.

...the fire's out...
...the last tears fall...
...broken heart...
...down came the last wall...





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Imagination said...
Apr. 16, 2010 at 5:51 am
wow!!! this is really good, i love the emotion that you have put into it
 
talia_is_happy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 16, 2010 at 6:08 pm
Thanks! I appreciate the feed back. Try reading some of my other stuff, you might like it. Thanks again!
 
***Rain*** said...
Jan. 21, 2010 at 8:47 pm
I really like how you kept the one stanza throughout the whole thing. The last few lines made me want to cry, Tals. T.T It just makes me want to write something that can live up to your writing.
 
dreamer_believer said...
Nov. 27, 2009 at 6:19 pm
this is a very strong poem. a lot of emotion went into this huh? :) beautiful and very meaningful. LOVE the last stanza :) great work here! would you mind checking out some of my work, id really like the comments :) keep writing, i'll look for more of your work!
 
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