Down Came the Walls

October 29, 2009
By talia_is_happy GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
talia_is_happy GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
18 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who mind- don't matter, and the people who matter- don't mind."
-Dr. Seuss


With feet like ice
I quake with feeling.
With squeaks like mice,
I shudder.

Sobs like fire.
A lone tear falls.
Breaking heart.
Down come the walls.

Though my voice fails,
I try to speak.
With hallow wails,
I'm breaking.

Sobs like fire.
A lone tear falls.
Breaking heart.
Down come the walls.

My knees are weak.
I cannot stand.
With tear streaked cheek,
I fall.

Sobs like fire.
A lone tear falls.
Breaking heart.
Down come the walls.

Falling apart,
I spill my sorrow.
Pour out my heart.
I broke.

...the fire's out...
...the last tears fall...
...broken heart...
...down came the last wall...



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on Apr. 16 2010 at 6:08 pm
talia_is_happy GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
18 articles 0 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who mind- don't matter, and the people who matter- don't mind."
-Dr. Seuss

Thanks! I appreciate the feed back. Try reading some of my other stuff, you might like it. Thanks again!

on Apr. 16 2010 at 5:51 am
Katherine93 GOLD, Liverpool, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"the only person you are destined to become is the person that you choose to be" - unknown

wow!!! this is really good, i love the emotion that you have put into it

on Jan. 21 2010 at 8:47 pm
VampiericRain GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
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Would you like a side of epic with that fail?

I really like how you kept the one stanza throughout the whole thing. The last few lines made me want to cry, Tals. T.T It just makes me want to write something that can live up to your writing.

on Nov. 27 2009 at 6:19 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

this is a very strong poem. a lot of emotion went into this huh? :) beautiful and very meaningful. LOVE the last stanza :) great work here! would you mind checking out some of my work, id really like the comments :) keep writing, i'll look for more of your work!


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