Shattered Lives in the Fast Lane

October 28, 2009
By Rebecca Porath GOLD, New City, New York
Rebecca Porath GOLD, New City, New York
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Riding along
The scandalous road
Our cares in the air,
Our dreams to explode.

The joy of our youth
Coursing through our veins,
Our smiles shine bright,
She takes the reins.

The red car,
Flies sixty per hour.
Where did our childhood go?
It wilted like a flower.

The four of us laughing
Having the time of our lives,
We stare at each other,
We've hit our stride.

Hearts pump wildly
Into the night,
The parties beginning,
Our thrill ignites.

The sparkly parkway
Goes on like a dream.
Our cares free as birds,
Our smiles beam.

In our little red wagon
Innocence fades away.
Drinking by night,
Hung-over by day.

That one clear evening
With the music blasting,
The four of us hazy,
Our good time ever-lasting.

Driving blissfully
Through the red light,
Our lives were just beginning,
Until that one cool night.

Another vehicle
Following the law,
Coming from the left-
Was what none of us saw.

Hands turning knobs
Fingers pressing keys,
Distractions abundant,
In times such as these,

The crack of a jaw
The snap of a neck,
The impact of a crash
Our lives no longer in check.

Unconscious in the hospital
With three broken limbs,
My memories were scattered,
With the joy of our whims.

I was the survivor
Dead do to the strife.
Why me. I wondered.
Why do I deserve life



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on Mar. 26 2012 at 4:10 pm
writer3499 GOLD, New Bedford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"it's impossible to live without failing at something, unless you live so cautiously that you might has well not have lived at all-in which case you fail by default."
-J.K.Rowling

I completly fell inlove with this! By the end I was almost cying!! It's so true and so deep...love it

on Dec. 29 2011 at 10:57 am
PrincessSparkleStar BRONZE, Michigan
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This poem is amazing! It gave me the chills, too. I really lOve the way you change the tone. Please check out my poem as well!

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on May. 14 2010 at 9:03 am
Paigeyy BRONZE, Murfreesboro, Tennessee
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Wow, I really like this. You did a fantastic job and I absolutely love the imagery you used, as well as your vivid, descriptive words.

on Mar. 9 2010 at 11:47 am
bonniex3rose GOLD, Pompton Plains, New Jersey
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this is absolutely amazing! your word choice is great

lafufu SILVER said...
on Feb. 15 2010 at 10:25 pm
lafufu SILVER, Butler, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"I live in a world of fantasy so keep your reality away from me. I see what I want; I want what I see and that is all okay by me."

Woah this just gave me chills. It's very well-written and presents a very emotional setting. I liked how you describe the crash especially

jordyn123 said...
on Dec. 11 2009 at 7:21 am
this is great poem! good job Rebecca P!

Dad & Sheila said...
on Nov. 30 2009 at 8:37 pm
Terrific... Deep emotion and images... Great job

on Nov. 19 2009 at 7:43 am
Stefanie Wasser SILVER, New City, New York
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This is great! It should definetly be published, you deserve it :)

emspb3445 said...
on Nov. 18 2009 at 7:43 pm
This gave me chills! Great job! Looks like you have a great future ahead of you!

on Nov. 18 2009 at 1:36 pm
kayswizzle BRONZE, Montvale, New Jersey
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this was amazing. i loved it.

cblau said...
on Nov. 15 2009 at 9:46 pm
The poem was very well written and quite powerful. You really drew in and impacted the reader.

Best of luck

on Nov. 15 2009 at 8:13 pm
Rebecca Porath GOLD, New City, New York
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thanks so much!!! i hope it does =)

on Nov. 14 2009 at 12:48 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Wow this is an amazing poem!

It's vry true and extremely realistic

You phrased everything vry well

and got your point across! Great rhyme and flow! This poem should MOST def be in the magazine...it is a must read for many pple today! I'm glad more pple are writing about things like this rather than flowers and butterflies lol I wrote a similar poem called Death by Drinking but its not on the website yet.

But wow I'm vry much amazed with this poem!

Great job and keep up the good work!

Your talent shows! :)


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