What You've Become

October 19, 2009
By Amanda Gurock BRONZE, New City, New York
Amanda Gurock BRONZE, New City, New York
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You’re like a blow to the head when you mess with my brain
My phone rings and I know you have a story
Words come out of your mouth and make you seem vain
You think people bow down in all your glory

You’re like a stab in the back when you pass me by
I suddenly become invisible when other people are around
I try to stay strong because I don’t want to cry
But you’ve always been able to knock me down

You’re like a kick to a broken leg when you act like you don’t care
I could be upset and it wouldn’t faze you
Whenever I have a problem you just sit there and stare
Are you ever going to get a clue?

You’re like a snap of the fingers when you change so fast
Why do you always mold yourself into someone you’re not?
The act you put on will never last
You used to be someone great, and I hope you haven’t forgot

You are the reason for my broken heart
I want things to go back to the way they used to be
In this new life you lead, I don’t want to take part
All I want is for you to remember when it was just you and me.

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This article has 3 comments.

on Jan. 22 2010 at 6:15 am
TiffanyJanelle, Jones, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
\"You say she is everything I\'m not, Thats because I\'m better. :)\"

I really like this one. Alot of girls including myself can relate to this. It's a really great poem.

on Oct. 31 2009 at 9:17 am
Michele Jones, Spring Valley, New York
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This is one of the best poems I have ever heard. Best one on TeenInk

ponzianif said...
on Oct. 29 2009 at 11:09 pm
This piece is insightful! Many girls can relate to the speaker’s experience. I think that this ballad shows how hurt girls are when they go through a nasty breakup. “Why do you always mold yourself into someone you’re not,” is a stellar example of how boys can change just to fit in with everyone else.

I also like how you used similes and metaphors, such as “like a stab in the back when you pass me by,” to further enhance the long term effects of a breakup. Overall, this is an outstanding ballad! I cannot wait to see more from you!


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