Teenage Tragedy

October 18, 2009
By Rebecca Porath GOLD, New City, New York
Rebecca Porath GOLD, New City, New York
15 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Riding along,
The scandalous road.
Our hopes in the air,
Our minds to explode.

Alcohol coursing,
Through our veins.
Laughing along,
Our friend takes the reins.

The sparkly parkway,
Goes on like a dream.
Our cares free as birds,
Our smiles beam.

In our little red wagon,
Our innocence fades away.
Drinking by night,
Hungover by day.

That one clear evening,
With the music blasting.
The four of us hazily looked around,
Our good time was ever – lasting.

Driving blissfully,
Through the red light.
Our lives were just beginning,
Until that one cool night.

Another vehicle,
Following the law.
Coming from the left,
Was what none of us saw.

Hands turning knobs.
Fingers pressing keys.
Distractions abundant,
In times such as these.

The crack of a jaw,
The snap of a neck,
The impact of a crash,
Our lives no longer in check.


Unconscious in the hospital,
With three broken limbs,
My memories were scattered,
With the joy of our whims.

I was the survivor,
Dead due to the strife.
Why me. I wondered.
Why do I deserve life.



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on May. 28 2012 at 10:08 am

There are just three words for this: I LOVE IT.

I love the beautiful way you say it... wow.... hats off! 


KelcyLynn GOLD said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 8:29 pm
KelcyLynn GOLD, Columbus, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
I will not be labled average -Rachel Joy Scott

It was wonderful! I loved every word of it!!

on Jan. 17 2012 at 5:26 pm
otherpoet SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone." - Audrey Hepburn

So beautiful, yet deadly. When you ask why me, just think, why not you? This poem is amazing, please keep writing because you can change the world with your words.

irishlass317 said...
on Sep. 29 2011 at 4:46 pm
irishlass317, Jefferson City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"I asked Jesus 'How much do you love me?' He answered 'This much.' And He streched out His arms and died."

Wow. This poem described teenage drinking in a way that is very sad, but beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!

hiii said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 12:21 pm
I really like this poem because it almost tells a story and it makes you want to keep reading til the end. Also because it is something you might be able to relate to as you grow up.

AlisRed said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 12:12 pm
This Was very touching i could understand exactly wat your feeling through you poem best luck to you live the life u were given to the fullest.

Leahrose211 said...
on Apr. 6 2011 at 12:08 pm
Leahrose211, Saugus, Massachusetts
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i literally just sat in silence and read this and now i am wondering if this really happened. did u know someone who this happened to? imagery very nice. love. this.

on Jan. 30 2011 at 1:08 am
missamanda GOLD, Ft. Collins, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"Love. Fall in love and stay in love. Write only what you love, and love what you write. The key word is love. You have to get up in the morning and write something you love, something to live for." -Ray Bradbury

That was amazing. Your words really took me away.

on Nov. 3 2010 at 10:32 am
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

powerful , awesome , well written . AMAZING ! iloved this ! please check out my work =]

on May. 11 2010 at 6:35 pm
Muzic4MeAlwayz SILVER, Wilmington, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is a perfect bond of union."

wow deep, dramatic, and Good

on May. 11 2010 at 6:23 pm
jordynpwns SILVER, 402,, Nebraska
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amazing.

on Nov. 15 2009 at 1:14 pm
Rebecca Porath GOLD, New City, New York
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yea because fast lane is my revised version. thank you

on Nov. 14 2009 at 12:50 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Vry good but i do prefer the fast lane one

on Nov. 13 2009 at 7:22 am
Grazianox3 BRONZE, Congers, New York
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this is so powerful! good job becca!

jayyxxkayy said...
on Nov. 4 2009 at 7:39 am
this is so good!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Oct. 30 2009 at 7:55 am
Jason Weinberg, New City, New York
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This is very good!!!

on Oct. 30 2009 at 7:48 am
Stefanie Wasser SILVER, New City, New York
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this is so good!

on Oct. 28 2009 at 8:17 pm
very_literary SILVER, Ballwin, Missouri
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Thank you for commenting on my article I See. Great poem, love the descriptions and how well it flows. It's really powerful and really gets the message across. Great job with this one, keep up the good work!


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