inside suicide

September 27, 2009
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Screaming inside not wanting to do it out loud.
Knowing he'd leave her if she made a sound.
Loving him was a slow form of suicide.
His life were the rules by which she had to abide.
So she went upstairs and grabbed a gun.
Knowing inside her what had to be done.
She looked at his bitter sweet smile one last time.
He never thought she'd end her own life.
He said it was like something strong possesed her.
He kept asking himself what had occured.
So she sent him a message from the grey sky above,
saying she was possesed, possesed by his love.

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KeyonnaB said...
Oct. 13, 2012 at 11:22 pm
i never thought of love as a slow suicide, breathe taking :)
Peanut98 said...
Oct. 27, 2011 at 7:41 pm
I love your poem!! it is amazing!!
Allthegoodnamesaretaken said...
May 26, 2011 at 5:55 pm
the flow is off alot but the concept is good
dragonluver62897 said...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 8:26 pm
This is an amazing poem and it's very deep and true. Suicide is a sad factor in life and sometimes we feel it's the only way out. I love it!
Leonor.Emmalyn said...
Mar. 21, 2011 at 1:34 pm
this is really good!
TamaraMari3 said...
Oct. 18, 2010 at 10:37 am
Wow, this was a very powerful piece! I loved it!
skysurferfan said...
Sept. 4, 2010 at 4:28 pm
I was very moved by this.  Gorgeous and poignant, I give it 5 stars easily.
iWriteToExpressThouqhts said...
Jul. 18, 2010 at 7:27 pm
This is a very well written poem . Powerful and interesting ! :) please check out my work and rate it if u have a chance :)
treegirl93 said...
May 17, 2010 at 2:02 pm
This is powerful. Maybe you could use less words to make it stronger. When i was reading it I starting singing it. It became a wonderful song. Ballads are always great songs- like The Beatles' songs.
Meghan M. said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 12:03 pm
this was amazing!
justbe-3 said...
Mar. 27, 2010 at 10:52 pm
that was amazing. you captured such a sensitibe subject and made it into a beautiful peace of poetry. 5 Stars!
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