Merci, Merci

September 22, 2009
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I’m all alone tonight
I know I got what I deserve
I know you really hurt

You just don’t know how to say
That everyday
You’re afraid to lose me
You know he is the only problem
Your only threat

I know you’re scared to death
That one day I’ll fall for him
Hit the floor harder than before
You never know what’s in store
I told you right off the bat
He was in my life

You couldn’t care less
And so I thought you were the best
I tell you what you wanna hear
Purely out of fear
Of waking up tomorrow
And knowing its over

Don’t leave me sober
I thought you’re my only one
Forget all our lies
As I try to forget the sound of your voice
When I said I’d made my choice

I know you miss me
But so does he
This has been hard on both of us
Merci, Merci
I think you should leave

I saw the tears in your eyes
I saw your face get red
Knowing for months
I had fed
Twenty thousand lies to you
Even though, we both knew,
This would never work out

We had our doubts and we had hope
Of staying off that slippery slope
It all comes back to me
As you walk away
I remember that first day
No, sorry, not ours.





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wishing4thebest2day said...
Feb. 6, 2010 at 2:34 pm
That is so good! I love the flow of the words. It is amazing! Fantastic job!
 
amyxu said...
Oct. 1, 2009 at 5:40 pm
Hey I was browsing Teen Ink and came across your poem. I like it! The title really caught my attention. One suggestion: in some places, especially the second to last stanza, the rhyming is a distraction. It might help to replace words like "fed" and phrases like "we both knew." Without the rhymes thrown in just for the sake of rhyming, the poem has a more authentic feel and somber mood to it. Anyway, nice work with your poem.
 
drummer33 replied...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 12:14 pm
Thanks, haha it was actually a song first, but I didn't like it as a song so I sorta transformed it into a poem.
Thanks though :)
 
bluejay31 said...
Sept. 29, 2009 at 11:15 pm
Haha....this was actually really good. When I read the title, I was like...huh? BUt after reading, it was great! I really like your voice. I can hear your voice throughout and it's consistant. I also like the message that you're trying to say though your writing. However, it was a little long. Maybe shorten in a little? Anyways, merci for a great poem! :)
 
Rachael W. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 30, 2009 at 8:00 pm
Oh, that is really good. Theres feeling and emotion, like I can see past the mask we all wear... I officially feel like a therapist now. Haha.
 
drummer33 replied...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 12:15 pm
Haha it's ok :) thanks!
 
drummer33 replied...
Oct. 4, 2009 at 12:15 pm
oh and BlueJay thanks for the comment :D I'll work on it haha
 
sydney_hope This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
May 15, 2010 at 11:05 pm
I really love this. It makes sense, I can relate. I love it.
 
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