Daddy I Miss You

September 4, 2009
By Malia BRONZE, Birmingham, Other
Malia BRONZE, Birmingham, Other
3 articles 0 photos 8 comments

I wake up to an unfamiliar surrounding
Your absence has changed everything
“You're not here daddy, you're out of sight”
“You’re not here daddy and nothing’s right”
I long to hear the sound of your voice
I'm stuck with a photo of you and no choice

I lye awake in the middle of the night
It's a nightmare struggling through this plight
I need a lullaby, a kiss goodnight
The happy memories I try to fight
Suddenly I smell your presence
And my happiness is immense
But this blissful feeling is ripped away
Today is just like every other day
As I realise it’s only your crisp white shirt I’m holding tight
A tear trickled down my cheek as I whispered “Goodnight”

Life without you continued this way
The pain eventually faded away
For years you were far from my touch
Your absence was not felt much
You left me as a child broken
I was grief-stricken with words unspoken
I don’t know who I am without you
I’m incomplete “daddy”, if only you knew
This empty void has been with me too long
When you came back into my life after so long
Having to carry on felt wrong
I won’t let you make me unhappy
Because you’re no longer my “daddy”

I continued to strive for happiness
On my pursuit of ending this emptiness
Unknowingly I searched for fatherly qualities in other men
I look back to see how reckless I was then
To them, I grew so emotionally attached
And this feeling I never wanted to dispatch
A father figure is what I was seeking
Without you there’s something missing
I’m constantly feeling inadequate even to this day
Love, Care & Support was all you had to pay
But you never bothered to be near
Not having you in my life caused me to veer
I find myself veering; I’m lost


The author's comments:
This poem is about a helpless four year old girl who longs for her father's presence after he walks out on her. Then as the poem progresses it shifts forward into the present tense where she has kept strong without having a father figure and escalates into deep anger when her feelings towards her father fluctuate intensely.

I wrote this through my personal experience of how not having a father figure affected me at times. There comes a point in your life when you're reminded that you're missing that one parent and it hits you hard. No matter how many mistakes they’ve made and no matter how much they have hurt you. You wish they could change.

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love2run GOLD said...
on Jun. 13 2010 at 8:04 pm
love2run GOLD, Star Valley, Wyoming
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Favorite Quote:
"I failed my way to success." Thomas Edison
"What kind of crazy nut would spend two or three hours a day just running?" Pre
"A ship in harbor is safe, but that's not what ships are built for." John Shedd

i can so so relate to this, it is so amazing!

candy said...
on Jun. 4 2010 at 5:26 am
this was wow it just breaks my heart reading this becuase that poem is me i do miss my daddy

Shahed GOLD said...
on May. 10 2010 at 6:13 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

I like it! very much! its amazing, and sad, or emotional but its about your dad so i feel you!

 

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Tomm said...
on Apr. 28 2010 at 5:26 pm
WOW. Words cannot decribe how beautiful your talent in writing is. This is a truly stunning poem and I wish you all the best of luck in getting published for real

on Apr. 14 2010 at 12:14 pm
ohxheyitslanzz, Saugus, Massachusetts
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this poem was amazing , as i had read it, it brought tears to my eyes ... it was so deepp and had touched me <3

ashaaley said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 11:59 am
ashaaley, Saugus, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
It's never to late to be what you might have been

this is amazing im legit going to cry, you have talent, i love it yyou will go somewhere with this i wanna like frame it♥

on Apr. 14 2010 at 11:55 am
alessaxoxo BRONZE, Saugus, Massachusetts
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this was very deep and sad it brought tears to my eyes. It was very well written and had alot of meanings and feelings too it ....amazing

Dhianna said...
on Mar. 12 2010 at 1:56 pm
WOW - I have no words to decribe how beautiful this is, well written and structured. Very effective, almost brought me to tears.

j0 eLLEN said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 7:36 am
i really liked it. its really good.

Sarah1 said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 4:30 am
That is absolutely beautiful, very deep, I had to print out a copy.

Pure talent and it shows, keep writing and hopefully one day you'll get published if you havn't already.

Jman said...
on Mar. 4 2010 at 9:14 am
i Feel like its a quite in touch article i understand

Saima Arshad said...
on Feb. 21 2010 at 5:16 pm
oh my gosh Malia thats amazing :)

i always knew ur so talented!!

its a sad poem but nice and amazing,

keep it up mate

saima xx

Zat Demha said...
on Feb. 12 2010 at 4:25 pm
What can I say. This poem is out of this world!

on Feb. 10 2010 at 1:33 pm
Your proper use of words eagers readers including me to keep on reading... Not to mention very intense on emotion as well. Superb! Keep it coming.

on Jan. 20 2010 at 4:09 pm
rockbrook6 BRONZE, Omaha, Nebraska
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This poem is really good, although it does make me sad. :( I have a dad, but he doesn't really ever try to be in my life, though. It can be really hard to not have a parent.

atiq92 said...
on Nov. 28 2009 at 10:26 pm
aww love it bt it is 2 emotionl 4 sum pep 2 sad poem

Malia BRONZE said...
on Nov. 17 2009 at 2:35 pm
Malia BRONZE, Birmingham, Other
3 articles 0 photos 8 comments
I made it too emotional. It's about 'my' daddy!

Meera said...
on Nov. 17 2009 at 1:17 pm
Malia...I Love Ittt x =) It's sooo sad n ur sooo talented xxx

afzaal said...
on Nov. 16 2009 at 3:07 pm
love it absolutely you are seriously talented... well done


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