Gravity

April 5, 2009
By MattRgrs PLATINUM, Maplewood, New Jersey
MattRgrs PLATINUM, Maplewood, New Jersey
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I fall. I climb. I climb and I fall.
But I climb to fall.
I build so I can watch what I make crumble to pieces.
I watch the sand sift through my open fingers.
I let the wave claim my castle as its own.
I let it all come down on me, earth and ocean.
I have just enough power to watch myself fail,
Just enough hope to let my dreams die in my arms,
Over and over.
I am gravity and I pull everything down.

The author's comments:
I wrote this to reflect self sabotage

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Oreozz SILVER said...
on May. 1 2012 at 5:29 pm
Oreozz SILVER, Palmer, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"The only thing I would change about you is your last name"

This has TRULY touched my heart!! It is beautiful and I can not say as to how this has touched me!!! It is like you took EXACTLY how I feel and put it in words!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!

mickeymouse said...
on May. 1 2012 at 2:31 pm
When I read your poem I liked how you used cliche in your writing to say that you are actually doing that. I also liked how you used figuative language to say that you were gravity.

NOLDEG BRONZE said...
on May. 1 2012 at 10:37 am
NOLDEG BRONZE, Waterford, Wisconsin
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This is a very good poem with personification.  I could relate to each of the verses which made it all the better.

on May. 1 2012 at 8:12 am
I like the metaphor and hyperbole. I like the hyperboe the to let my dreams die in my arms.

on Apr. 9 2012 at 6:22 pm
CreativeAngel SILVER, Vaddez, Alaska
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I love the meaning of the poem and how deep it is. Just an awesome poem.

on Dec. 21 2011 at 1:23 am
SwagGuy101 BRONZE, Millington, Tennessee
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This was great, very deep thinking.

Please look at mine and give me advice, anyone.

-Comment from a guy with swag


byebye said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 6:52 pm
byebye, Nevermore, Other
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Simplistic yet so complex in meaning! Love it, great work.

Also, I haven't been getting much feedback on my work. Would love to have others check out my poems, "Butterflies" and "Falling" :)


on Nov. 29 2011 at 10:58 am
MarissaWhitecloud SILVER, Oskaloosa, Iowa
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Not sure what this means but its wonderful!

ellen22 GOLD said...
on Nov. 7 2011 at 5:43 pm
ellen22 GOLD, Dallas, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"I always preferred having wings to having things." -Pat Schroeder

I think it's beautiful and deep. Good job!

chantelle.g said...
on Nov. 7 2011 at 1:35 pm
chantelle.g, Kitchener, Other
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I've read every single one of your poems. You're very talented.

irishlass317 said...
on Nov. 7 2011 at 6:51 am
irishlass317, Jefferson City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"I asked Jesus 'How much do you love me?' He answered 'This much.' And He streched out His arms and died."

Oh my goodness I looooooooooove it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! very, very good!!!!!!!

Kayte BRONZE said...
on Oct. 16 2011 at 4:34 pm
Kayte BRONZE, Sandy, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Let no one ever come to you without leaving better and happier. Be the living expression of God's kindness: kindness in your face, kindness in your eyes, kindness in your smile."
-Mother Teresa

 

This is amazing!! Describes my life beautifully. Keep it up!


on Oct. 16 2011 at 2:43 pm
DecemberAli27 GOLD, MT.Vernon, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Art is not what you see. Its what you make others see.
Edgar Degas

I love this poem! It makes me think about the way I've treated my self!

noname37014 said...
on Sep. 24 2011 at 8:01 am
noname37014, Holland, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"As I write I create myself again and again."
-Joy Harjo

This is a really nice poem! Subtle, but still understandable.

on Sep. 3 2011 at 11:36 am
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Haha, thankee kindly :)

on Sep. 2 2011 at 2:50 pm
Mariah_0.0 SILVER, Peyton, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
Be the change you want to see in the world

I liked it, it's a really good piece

Risible SILVER said...
on Sep. 2 2011 at 8:27 am
Risible SILVER, Norwalk, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Sooner or later, those who win are those who think they can." -Richard Bach

beautifully said IamtheshyStargirl, love the imagery 

poet aulakh said...
on Aug. 11 2011 at 9:10 pm
it is well described to hope and desperation

Ellimee said...
on Jul. 21 2011 at 12:01 pm
If anyone says you're an OK writer, show them this piece and watch their eyes widen and jaws drop. This is awsum!

on Jul. 20 2011 at 3:29 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

subatance = Substence.


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