10 Minute Spill

April 1, 2009
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One step at a time
You can do it
A whir of emotions pass by
A voice in your head.
Say yes,
No,
Stop
What would your mother say?
A cloud floating by
A blackberry so juicy to lick.
It's so easy to find a needle in a haystack
Yet you can't dive off a cliff.





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EdytD said...
Apr. 24, 2009 at 9:33 pm
Good job! I'm not sure what it is about, but to me the last line seems to convey not an impossibility, but something you can't bring yourself to do. It seems to be talking about temptations.

I'd love if you looked at my poetry. Thanks!
 
xXxFlamingWaterxXx said...
Apr. 10, 2009 at 10:07 pm
I don't think it sounds depressing, but then again, you havn't seen my poetry (you should read it though) I think your poem was really good! :)
 
xXxFallingTearsxXx said...
Apr. 16, 2009 at 10:48 pm
Oh my gosh, please tell me when you're new poems are up, i love your writing style, you are really good!
 
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