April 1, 2009
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with vacuous
eyes staring blindly.
Quiet, but for tumultuous
noises inside an already befuddled
mind. Silently, I sit, brow furrowed,
lost in thought, in an engulfing emptiness
that I have created, and I know that
I have a secret, and the secret is mine.

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Rowann. said...
May 6, 2009 at 11:16 pm
your poetry connects with me, on a certain degree. you really made me feel the way you were, and that's hard to do. Bravo, dear.
EdytD said...
May 6, 2009 at 9:00 pm
No, they haven't been published yet, but i'm hoping! :D
hannahbanana24 said...
May 6, 2009 at 2:07 am
Wow, I really like this piece. I have felt like that quite a bit. Your pieces are good; I'm enjoying reading them.
xXsmileXx This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 5, 2009 at 10:25 pm
Thnx for commenting on my poem. This is really good and i never would have thought of the whole first line has one word and so on. unique. Keep writing!
pinkvolleyballgirl said...
May 4, 2009 at 1:33 am
i just wanted to say thanks so much for taking the time to read my poetry and for the great constructive comments. You are really talented and i cant believe your pieces havent been published! Have they? lol idk. But they should be. i like the style you used in this piece. Great job
xXxFallingTearsxXx said...
Apr. 29, 2009 at 2:30 am
I really like this! You have a great word choice!
EdytD said...
Apr. 29, 2009 at 1:15 am
Thanks guys for the comments - they mean so much to me! :D
Wolfayne said...
Apr. 28, 2009 at 4:39 pm
This is a peom that is true in it's own, special way. That truth is something that can relate to so many nowadays. That 'secret' that you're keeping from the rest of us poets, I swear, it won't be a secret for much longer! I'll find it!
YeseniaG said...
Apr. 25, 2009 at 12:13 am
love this and the silent confusion
EdytD said...
Apr. 23, 2009 at 9:14 pm
thanks! Personally, secrets confuse and bother me to no end - I hyper-analyze, so I am often preoccupied with something - which might be able to be seen in my poem. As I muse, everyone else is somewhat tuned out, and I enter my own world.
This one was a lot of fun to write - it was different and unusual. I'm glad you enjoyed it as well!
Mikal said...
Apr. 23, 2009 at 6:38 am
Hey! I love secrets! I luv keeping them and createing them but what I like better is this poem. I like it's lenght. It gets straight to the piont!
Hannah:] said...
Apr. 20, 2009 at 2:20 am
WOW. this was really cool! i love how you added one more word and how each line explained more and more. The similarities between your poems and Poe's are very clear! keep it up!
CutiePie said...
Apr. 15, 2009 at 7:24 pm
this is a very powerful piece and i enjoyed reading it
EdytD said...
Apr. 13, 2009 at 4:45 pm
what's interesting is that people seem to see the similarities between poe's and my work especially in this poem, but this is a poem that i thought the style was especially different. but it's probably b/c of the content, as opposed to the rhythm (which is very different).
TheDarkOne said...
Apr. 13, 2009 at 2:30 pm
I like this one too, you have your own feel to it as well as it being similar to Edgar's writing. Keep it up Edyt, you are doing an awesome job! :D
EdytD said...
Apr. 12, 2009 at 12:14 am
thanks! If you notice, each line has one more word added to it - starting with 1 word and ending with nine; rather than using my usual beat and rhythm, I played with the poem by increasing the length of each line.

I've been hooked on Poe, so to speak, since about fourth grade, and from then on I've been an avid reader of all of his short stories and poems, so I'm not surprised that his style is rubbing off on me. It's kind of neat, though, that other people realize it. T... (more »)
innergenious745 said...
Apr. 9, 2009 at 8:09 pm
i like it! it has an abstract air about it that i really like :) thanks for commenting on my 'i dare you' story :) sorry if it was confusing ; ) i like Edgar allan poe too, your writing style and his ARE quite similar, but like most yours has an individuality to it :) keep writing your really good :)
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