Living my own life

March 31, 2009
By Mikal SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
Mikal SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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Like a nail screwed in a wooden plate.
Like a fish swimming in a lake.
Life means nothing if not full
of life.
So I’m living my own life
living my own life.
Life is a broken glass.
Can you fix it?
Like a star in the galaxy.
Like a stage in a studio.
Life means nothing if you say so.
So I’m living my own life
living my own life.
Life is a burning cat.
Can you save it?
Make your decisions
for the hour glass’s sand is falling.

The author's comments:
Hey, My name is Mikal, I'm a male. I am trying to become a song writter . I love writting songs. I live in Brooklyn!

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on May. 4 2009 at 7:58 pm
EleanorRigby PLATINUM, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The optomist proclaims we live in the best of worlds, and the pessimist fears this is true." - James Branch Cabell

that sounds like it could really be a song, i can easily tell thats what u want to do. i agree with the other person, you should maybe add to it and make it longer, and maybe explain some of your metaphors so that the listeners can relate more. good job!



oh and everyone it qould be really awesome of you to check out my poems cuz i love getting comments!

AquaGem SILVER said...
on Apr. 25 2009 at 6:24 pm
AquaGem SILVER, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

Life it too short to let you matter.

I liked it a lot. Seemed like it could easily be turned into a song, if it were a bit longer. I'm interested in what beat the chorus would have.

EdytD SILVER said...
on Apr. 21 2009 at 10:30 am
EdytD SILVER, Livingston, New Jersey
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it's neat - I liked it! Only thing is, if you want it to be a song, you might want to make it a little longer. But I loved the comparison -the burning cat is definitely not one I've heard used often! ;D

It sounds like a song, though - the rhyming and repetition almost give it a beat already.



I'd love if you checked out some of my poetry! thanks.

Mikal SILVER said...
on Apr. 13 2009 at 2:08 pm
Mikal SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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I need ur comments!

Mikal SILVER said...
on Apr. 13 2009 at 1:44 pm
Mikal SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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