Frozen lands of red

March 22, 2009
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Our death sentence,

Our frozen feet,

We walk in lines, straight and neat

5 million gone, till death we part

Broken bodies, broken hearts



We sit like ducks

On hunting ground

Disheveled bodies all around

We try to bury all the dead,

In this frozen land of red



Trapped like cattle

Our lives turned gray

As we disappear away

Children undernourished cry

But still we stand in line to die



Then winter comes

It’s colder still

The old and young becoming ill

And yet they carry on their way

Waiting for a brighter day




Six million are amongst the dead
In these frozen lands of red


Now here I am and here I lie
As I await my turn to die.





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Jaquie This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 18, 2009 at 2:50 am
I absolutely loved it. That was truly fantastic. The mixture of depression and apocalypse was inspiring. I liked it, a lot. Please, keep writing.
God Bless
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Nonna said...
Apr. 13, 2009 at 1:00 pm
Very Impressive and insightful - a wonderfully poignant piece!!
 
labbie21 said...
Apr. 12, 2009 at 11:11 pm
This is an amazing piece of writing. Did not know where it would take me, and was awestruck with the poignancy of where I was taken. Quite a talented young person.
 
Peedy said...
Apr. 12, 2009 at 3:25 am
Great Writing Keep at it!
 
Captain41 said...
Apr. 11, 2009 at 2:30 am
The author has created a sad stillness. Winter is clear. Hopelessness is clear. It screams.
 
inklink said...
Apr. 10, 2009 at 8:04 pm
Vivid imagery, nice use of analogies. You can really feel the despair. Impressive!~
 
Canni41 said...
Apr. 10, 2009 at 7:23 pm
Simple yet speaks thousands in each line. Wonderful job!
 
jes said...
Apr. 10, 2009 at 6:21 pm
This is really a deeply moving piece of written work!
 
victoria C. said...
Apr. 10, 2009 at 5:33 pm
Thank You.
 
Mrs.P said...
Apr. 10, 2009 at 4:26 pm
Great job! Very Deep! Your readers can feel the emotion and intensity of the scene so much so that it's scary!
 
BROOKSE said...
Apr. 10, 2009 at 3:46 pm
FANTASTIC WRITING!
 
popeye said...
Apr. 10, 2009 at 2:30 pm
A great piece. keep up the good work
 
Cindilouwho said...
Apr. 9, 2009 at 10:53 pm
Awesome work. Very reflective and thought-provoking. Keep up the fabulous work!
 
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