April 18, 2017

I truly hope that you two are happy

But right now, on the inside I'm very slaphappy

I'm starting to be bitter

I want you to know you're my embitter

I'll get my revenge

In this drive for venge

I'm not alone

For now, sit on your throne

Soon you'll be a peasant at my feet

I won't leave until you're deplete

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May 17 at 9:19 pm
My favorite lines in this are "For now, sit on your throne/ Soon you'll be a peasant at my feet". The way some of the words are shortened to fit the rhyme scheme ("venge" "deplete") is a bit awkward; I would recommend changing them to other words. Also, the meaning of the line "I'm not alone" is not clear. Who else is with the speaker?
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