The Invisible Circle

March 15, 2009
By , grand rapids, MI
I pace the perimeter of the play structure,
My hands, clenched uncomfortably tight into furious fists, hang stone still, clamped straight at my sides,
There's an invisible circle
Like an electric fence, it snakes its way around the innocent slides, and swings,
Separating me, from them,
The freak, from the so-called normal world,
There's an invisible circle
To any onlooker, the scene looks ordinary,
No wall, no nothing,
But I know what's there,
And so do they,
After all, they built it
There's an invisible circle
It wasn't there before,
Or maybe I was just blind to that inhumane structure,
That cruel wall of silly insecurities and fears,
The one form of segregation we still allow,
There's an invisible circle
We used to get along perfectly fine,
Then, one day, I suddenly wasn't 'cool' enough
The circle had been drawn,
I didn't belong there anymore,
There's an invisible circle
You've probably seen one before,
A simple division between the popular,
And the nerdy, geeky, dorky, dweeby not-so-popular,
Next time you see one,
Do something.
Break the invisible circle

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mmodeusher said...
Mar. 25, 2010 at 9:05 am
This poem is very original...I agree with the comments on repetition...It brings me back to the years where I was bullied, makes me not ashamed of those years...Because I was "'cool' enough"!
FarmGirl said...
May 28, 2009 at 11:20 pm

a friend told me about it
I disagree this is ssooo awesome

Keepa writin'
Elii said...
May 22, 2009 at 8:14 pm
Love it. i think it is awesome.
I think yours deservedd 5 star
eierlegendewollmilchsau#1 said...
May 1, 2009 at 9:36 pm
I really enjoyed your poem.
Cruz liker said...
Apr. 30, 2009 at 7:40 pm
I think Army girl is a jerk.
I really like the poem and "Anonymous" is a awesome writer. Keep writing!!!!
"alice" said...
Apr. 26, 2009 at 3:11 am
first: army girl this poem is SOOOOOOOO not juvenile! it shows how intimidating poularity and peer-pressure can be.
secondly: i totally agree with alyssofhearts this poem rox. who here likes adam lambert?
Rent freak said...
Apr. 24, 2009 at 8:15 pm
Love it! I really lik it in an elementary scene, shows when clicks are startedddddd. I think u should get publi.
LoboReina said...
Apr. 23, 2009 at 2:54 am
Firstly thanks for your comment on my poem, "Mother". I really like yours, I like how you ahve taken an intangible object that is so very realistic intodays world and put it into words. Unlike some of the other commenters I also like the playground scene, it makes one think of when everybody stopped being friends and cliches start to kick in.
alyssofhearts said...
Apr. 21, 2009 at 9:52 pm
WOW!!! Cool poem!!! I totally disagree with "army girl". I think setting the poem in a playground signifies the immaturity of the bullies/meanies. All in all, I love it!!! Keep writing.
mmodeusher replied...
Mar. 25, 2010 at 9:01 am
Are you the author?
Shutup and KISS ME (not the dog) said...
Apr. 18, 2009 at 5:38 pm
i lve pome. it awsom. I stll lerning spek english.
Army girl said...
Apr. 17, 2009 at 10:51 pm
Cool poem- but is it really nessacary to have the scene in a playground? Pulease, it's like a baby area. Get real anonymous, i think i won't tell my friends; too lil' kiddish.
Smiley said...
Apr. 17, 2009 at 10:47 pm
Hey that was a rad poem; I want to write like u. I was thinking- wanna be penpals or facebook friendsssssss?
Email me at
P>S>awesome peom
Forest Hills Central Principle said...
Apr. 17, 2009 at 9:34 pm
That is a very pleasant poem. I wish more of my students would take the time and effort to publish poems. (that is, I think you're an 8th grader at some school)
I liked how you mentioned you weren't "cool" enough, and the circle had been drawn. I also liked how you used a slight repetition.
Overall, it was pleasant to read.
Goth Super Girl said...
Apr. 17, 2009 at 9:27 pm
I like it.
There's this group of gals in mi school, so like that.
volleyball chick said...
Apr. 14, 2009 at 10:42 pm
Wow, that is soooo awesome. The popular gals of my school are very like that. Great poem!!!!
swuglythespian said...
Apr. 1, 2009 at 9:13 pm
that was awesome......haha ik ur speaking from experience (circle of friendship!!!) jk jk i totes feel that every day
"Alice" said...
Mar. 31, 2009 at 11:43 pm
OMJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJJ!!!!! You rocked that poem! I could TOTALLY relate! You're SUCH a a great writer! As randy would say: that was hot DAWG!!!!!!!
Cruz Liker said...
Mar. 30, 2009 at 9:37 pm
That is an awesome poem!!!!!
Really relatable!!!!
Hope you get published!!!!!
dancing queen said...
Mar. 29, 2009 at 9:02 pm
OMG! That was amazing. i can totally connect to this. The metaphore is perfect. Great job!
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