Anyone out there

March 21, 2009
By psycholinzmeier GOLD, Kaukauna, Wisconsin
psycholinzmeier GOLD, Kaukauna, Wisconsin
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This deep dark hole keeps eating away at me
Everyday i feel less and less
care less and less
Soon i will feel nothing and not care about anything or anyone but yet one person
Were is my savior my hero
Where is superman in my time of need
I know where not careing
not careing abou me
Is there anyone out there that will be my new hero my savior?
Or will i just parish into a black abliss and no one will care
Does anyone care about me like me love me
Or is everyone dead
Am i a ghost that no one can see
Like a helpless kid lost in the woods I grow tried and weak and start to wonder is there anyone out there that can save me is there anyone willing?



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Phoenixx GOLD said...
on Oct. 7 2010 at 4:34 pm
Phoenixx GOLD, Toronto, Other
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meaningful, theres a whole lot of emotion in this poem. Very nice work :)

on Oct. 17 2009 at 5:47 am
ThereIsAlwaysHope GOLD, Belfast, Other
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Favorite Quote:
'Miles to go before I sleep'
- Robert Frost

deep and amazing.

well done (:

on Apr. 15 2009 at 9:48 pm
ImDumbStruck DIAMOND, Springfield, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"If at first you don't succeed, destroy any evidence."

i ask myself this question all the time. i wonder if anyone would care wether i live or die.

I think this poem is great and as for the grammar, writers do that all the time. I don't think it makes a big difference if the poem is as good as it is.

on Apr. 11 2009 at 8:19 pm
Chicken--Pie SILVER, Higher Bebington, Other
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Nice flow and setting, but your missing a load of punctuation and letters and, in a few places, there are incorrect spellings. I know there's nothing you can do about it now and I'm sorry that I'm so OCD when it comes to grammar but I find the whole thing snaggs if there's stuff like that missing (or wrong). The structure just moves apart and becomes a handful of lone words that only just resembles a proper sentence... But I suppose that kind-of fits the mood of your poem. And, re-reading it, it kind-of suits the poem's theme perfectly just the way it is. So don't listen to me :P

kataria said...
on Apr. 4 2009 at 8:38 pm
This is really good. I like your style..thanks for the comment on my poem!


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