You Never Came

March 10, 2009
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The stars glittered brightly,
Reflecting on the oil-smooth water,
The powder-white sand mirroring
The clear, bright moon.
I just sat there, waiting.
'Where is he?' I wondered.
The night would have been perfect,
But you still didn't come.
I sat there till dawn.
Then I slowly stood,
Crying silently to myself.
You never came.

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BoosflashThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 7, 2010 at 8:29 pm
very nice. you have a very natural talent for vividly portraying your surroundings in a way that humanity has been struggling to do since the 3rd grade. i see you write alot of haiku' should read "it's you turn; try" by both have nice work..
Wolfayne said...
Aug. 26, 2009 at 3:42 pm
Thank you!!!!!
~*The-Broken-Hearted-Girl*~ said...
Aug. 26, 2009 at 2:37 am
this was really good. i loved it! :)
Wolfayne said...
Jun. 7, 2009 at 9:50 pm
You're a hard man to please aren't you? I meant it to be like that. She was crying silently. A single tear, and she wasn't really moving other than getting up.
EdytD said...
May 26, 2009 at 9:56 pm
Love the strong imagery in the beginning. You could strengthen the second to last line by describing the tears running down your face, or your shoulders shaking in anger/sadness.
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