Dark Angel

March 7, 2009
By IanSeay GOLD, Baltimore, Maryland
IanSeay GOLD, Baltimore, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
Never forget who you are, for surely the world won’t. Make it your strength. Then it can never be your weakness. Armor yourself in it, and it will never be used to hurt you.” -Tyrion Lanniser (ASoIaF)


A beautiful creature
Who i love
But i evil
A dark angel
A creature
That has stolen my heart
And will most likely rip it open
And feast apon it's insides
But i don't mind
Because it's still her
And it's my choice
To hand over my heart
To the
Dark Angel


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on Mar. 31 2009 at 11:54 pm
hey_itskatelyn PLATINUM, Willis, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
“God, of your goodness, give me yourself; you are enough for me, and anything less that I could ask for would not do you full honour. And if I ask anything that is less, I shall always lack something, but in you alone I have everything”

Wow this is kinda haunting, but completely captivating. The length of the poem leaves me wanting to read more about the mysterious dark angel. Are you a fan of twilight? Cause this completely reminds me of some of Stephanie Meyer's descriptions.

consider the phrase: "Will most likely rip it open" THe phrase kinda sticks out among the other imagery.

what about something like:

"and is destined to rip it apart"? It adds rhyming and flow.

Just a suggestion, keep up the good work! :]


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