Guitar-String Lover

March 5, 2009
By YeseniaG SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
YeseniaG SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
7 articles 1 photo 122 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is what happens when you're busy making plans.


When can I call-
If I ever feel the need to?
When can I call-
That is to say, I'm wanted to?

You leave snowflakes in my ear
Wrap me in a blanket of fleece
So I might melt your words away

Straddle this swing with me
Like we used to
When we could talk,
Without thinking twice.
When we could talk
And not have to try

Art never seemed so loveless
As when you sang your words of good-bye
Your guitar strings strum
And my eyes turn to run
From this devilish sight of you gone

Chords of broken hearts
Your striking words
Like digging nails
And stories of what's to come
Of what goodbye will mean to me

Your shadow doesn't follow
I don't see you standing beside
So I'll cry alone
On this long walk home
And wonder who your next
Listener will be


The author's comments:
I was actually inspired to write this by other writers whose word usage was so unique. They had great plays on words that I really wanted to try out. I wanted the feeling a reader would get to be of a friendship evolving into a relationship that faltered due to the relationship. She had always been there for him and listened to his songs, but soon his songs grew cold and she was no longer needed in his life.

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on Jul. 13 2009 at 1:17 pm
despurlock DIAMOND, Morgantown, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The heart has its reasons which reason does not know." -Pascal, Pensees, 1670

Youe poem is really beautiful. I can see it vividly. Great job, keep it up!

on Mar. 30 2009 at 7:44 pm
YeseniaG SILVER, Livonia, Michigan
7 articles 1 photo 122 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is what happens when you're busy making plans.

thanks! i really appreciate the comments

on Mar. 25 2009 at 2:30 am
stephaniekip PLATINUM, Cranford, New Jersey
47 articles 5 photos 18 comments
I find this poem to be almost inspiring. What really makes it great is that anybody can relate to what the poem is saying, it's typical of relationships. Your poem successfully creates a picture in the reader's mind, rather than telling them. That's been a problem for me in many of my poems. Anyway, I think you did a great job and I'd love to read more.

-Stephanie

mansi k SILVER said...
on Mar. 24 2009 at 6:18 am
mansi k SILVER, Vernon Hills, Illinois
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I love the imagery with the guitar. with your comments, keep it original and personal, those always turn out the best. keep writing (:


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