After Wounded Knee MAG

March 1, 2009
By Elise Lockwood BRONZE, Carmel, Indiana
Elise Lockwood BRONZE, Carmel, Indiana
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You still wear that old war paint
(angry lines slashed above your eyes)
I can feel you waiting for the battle to come
(spikes of red staining your cheeks)
There are no pawing horses now
No painted hands on their haunches
(the number of warrior souls you stole)
No noonday sun beating on bare backs
No smell of sweat and leather and bravery
Puncturing the familiar woodsmoke
(breastplates of porcupine quills, feathers in hair)
No ululations of war, yelling at fear
No singing, no dancing, no tribes, no homes
(scars left from the struggle free from the sun)
Just a drum drum drum beat
(a piece of flesh left for the Great Spirit)
Piercing through dreams.


The author's comments:
This was inspired by the Battle at Wounded Knee in 1890, a massacre of the Sioux.

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on Apr. 15 2010 at 9:54 pm
alayapoetgirl BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Life is hard; but it's harder if you're stupid. -John Wayne

I enoyed this especially the last line "piercing through dreams". Amazing vocabulary, this is unbelievable. Decsription is wonderful. Check out my opinion essay on animal rights/vegetarianism...

KylieK GOLD said...
on Apr. 15 2010 at 8:26 pm
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

wow, that was phenominal!

on Apr. 15 2010 at 7:25 pm
SOSaiXD PLATINUM, Oviedo, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Always believe that everything happens for a reason. If you give God long enough to prove His point, He will always blow you away."

Jah. Don't listen to them. If all they're going to do is put it down, then they don't deserve your time. I thought it was wonderfully thought out and unique. (:

on Apr. 15 2010 at 6:34 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

don't listen to anything mean people say about this poem. they're just jealous that they can't write half as well as you can. great job with this poem! it's one of my favorites.

Rhoswen BRONZE said...
on Apr. 15 2010 at 5:02 pm
Rhoswen BRONZE, Oklahoma City, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"Is it dead?"

I liked it.

on Apr. 15 2010 at 2:58 pm
writergirl13 GOLD, Cherry Hill, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
All are lunatics, but he who can analyze his delusions is called a philosopher.
Ambrose Bierce

I have a right to post what I want, and I happened to want to post a positive, encouraging message, because personally I actually liked it!!!! If you disagree, FINE!! You don't have to like every piece that you read, but you don't have to try to insult people who actually like someone else's work! And i've read a lot of pieces written in a similar style, and this one is actually pretty good!

kysh15 said...
on Mar. 24 2010 at 11:19 pm
kysh15, Edmonds, Washington
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this is such a powerful and moving piece. keep writing!

on Mar. 24 2010 at 8:05 pm
writergirl13 GOLD, Cherry Hill, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
All are lunatics, but he who can analyze his delusions is called a philosopher.
Ambrose Bierce

No!!!! This is not lame at all!!!! It's deep and it's meaningful! And I just want to say that it's incredible that a teen living a 120 years after the riots and crisis with the Sioux indians wrote this poem, and yet it sounds like it's from that time because it captures what happened so well! How is that lame??

Elise, please feel free to check out my work, I'd appreciate it. :)

on Mar. 24 2010 at 6:42 pm
MCRlover2011 BRONZE, Kemp, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Be yourself, don't take any one's (ugh they keep editing this T_T) shit and never let them take you alive!!!- Gerard Way

eh, i woulda done something ya know... not lame...

on Mar. 24 2010 at 9:14 am
who is this

soccer4 said...
on Mar. 24 2010 at 9:11 am
that is very cool im from IN too i live in hamilton county!!!

on Mar. 24 2010 at 9:08 am
this is the best poem ive ever seen

meyoubed:) said...
on Mar. 24 2010 at 9:03 am
this is the gayest thing ive ever heard booooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Mar. 24 2010 at 9:02 am
NativeWriter GOLD, Santa Rosa, California
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One day our nation shall rise again and all scares left by these vial men shall be lifted and as long as we stay true to the great spirits of this world they will return just remember their souls live on

ColeK said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 8:23 pm
ColeK, San Augstine, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"We have doomed the Wolf not for what it is, but for what we have deliberately and mistakenly perceived it to be.. the mythologized epitome of a savage, ruthless killer.. which is, in reality no more than a reflexed images of ourselves." -Farley Mowat

this is a great poem

BMMSKN said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 5:41 pm
THIS IS A GREAT POEM, LOVE IT! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!

bmmszw said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 10:21 am
it was a great poem

bmmsta said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 10:10 am
it sounded cool but i really didnt get it....but it was pretty cool

bmmsmb said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 10:10 am
it was cool i liked it.

bmmseh said...
on Mar. 2 2010 at 9:36 am
I really, really, really liked this poem! Keep on writing!!!!!!


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