I wish

February 21, 2009
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I wish that when I turn around I would your smile
I wish that when I close my eyes I would see you skin
I wish that the sky had your eyes
I wish that the sun had your lips
I wish that the wind spoke your words
I wish that the air had your sent
I wish that I was lucky enough to have you





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Kristen W. said...
Apr. 23, 2009 at 4:18 pm
I've read all of your work and its the same style. Each line in Death begins with death, this begins with I wish. And your Room one was repetitive. I think you have great potential if you tried a different style
 
rootbeerfloat92 said...
Apr. 5, 2009 at 12:56 pm
I like how you are wishing to find parts of the person in things you see every day. It feels like you want to be surrounded by them when that isn't possible. Though the first two lines had a small error, I like it =)
 
YeseniaG said...
Mar. 30, 2009 at 5:12 pm
i dont really understand some of it...are the missnig wheres missing on purpose? i guess i just don't really comprehend the train of thought. the concept is great; i love it, but the execution comes a bit short.
 
edye p said...
Mar. 30, 2009 at 3:39 am
this piece is very powerful-- the repition in the beginning of each line is, for the most part, responsible for this. keep writing, you are very talanted.
 
ckalani replied...
Oct. 21, 2009 at 3:10 pm
Thank you very much. Feel free to check out my other work. : )
 
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