Frustration

February 26, 2009
By L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
L.Neale BRONZE, Brighton, Other
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Step with thunderous broken pride,
On this day your wisdom died.
Lips pulled tight, stretch and break,
Stitch the corners to hide your ache
Smash teeth up and grind them down
Let lies and smoking hatred drown.
Feel the ache as they fall apart,
Choke on pieces or else depart,
It gnaws your heart and bones to dust,
Curdles intestines, and turns blood to rust.

But sit with me, and talk a while,
I will try to mend your smile,
And if I cannot cure frustration,
Let me bare your desperation.


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on Oct. 11 2014 at 11:24 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

This is so beautiful, raw and rather sad too. It's perfect and talentedly written. Nevr stop writing, please! You have such a talent and greatness in you. :) I hope to read more of your work soon, if you're still a member. :) Thank you so much, for sharing this. :) Thank you. 

on Feb. 17 2013 at 6:52 pm
WistfulThinking PLATINUM, Kiln, Mississippi
21 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
'Behind him, across vast distances of space and time, from the place he had left, he thought he heard music too. But perhaps it was only an echo.'- The Giver by Lois Lowry

This is truly amazing. I loved it! You should keep up this amazing work. You have a special talent:)

on Oct. 15 2012 at 11:12 am
NotWriting_Bazinga PLATINUM, Park Rapids, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"She thought in Italics and felt in CAPITALS." Henry James, Jr
"The terrible part is the truth is the only thing you want to hear.... but the last thing you want to admit." Casey Dalton

Wow. i dont know what else to say. Just... wow.

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on Aug. 29 2012 at 9:26 pm
hail97, Carlisle, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.

This is so good!  I hope to see more of you work!

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on Feb. 4 2011 at 11:39 pm
Kiyoko GOLD, Knoxville, Tennessee
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Independence is my happiness, I view things as they are without regard to place or person. My country is the world, and my religion is to do good. - Thomas Paine

this is a really good poem. my work is much less structured than this, but I think that this flows just as cleanly with the rhyming. I like it. My only question, did you mean to use the word ache twice, so close together? It is a very descriptive word, but word choice is very important. One last thing, I like the contrast of the first, longer, stanza to the second one. the first is more conflicted, and intense, where the second one has a pleasant shift to the resolution. Nice Work!

on Dec. 2 2010 at 9:05 am
LeonorEmmalyn, Arroyo Hondo, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"I hold with those who favor fire."
"Two roads diverged in a yellow wood, and I-- I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference."

This is amazing! Really love your work.

on Nov. 30 2010 at 11:16 pm
AliMallie BRONZE, Westminster, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm selfish, impatient, and a little insecure. I make mistakes. I am out of control and at times, hard to handle, but if you can't handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don't deserve me at my best." -Marilyn Monroe

Chills. I am in awe. I would be honored if you would ever read my work and critique it.

on Aug. 12 2010 at 5:46 pm
sunrise_faerie GOLD, Fredericksburg, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
things are only as dark as you make them.
there is always beauty in every situation. look for it and you will see.
smile; sometimes it's all that will keep you from crying.

wow. just... wow. great work. keep it up, i beg you, please keep it up.

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on May. 16 2010 at 9:25 am
Wow, this was amazing. You're really good at writing poems.

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on May. 16 2010 at 9:22 am
Eilatan GOLD, Old Greenwich, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Nobody is normal. Everybody in the world is a weirdo freak. Except you, which makes you a weirdo freak."

dude. (i mean that as a generic term, as you could be a boy or a girl)

that is some first-rate writing.


on May. 10 2010 at 5:30 pm
Boosflash DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Get, Got, Gotten.

man youre really good. I love how everyone breaks their backs trying to rhyme and it naturally comes to you like youre the mountain man and you live here.   5 stars.

on Mar. 13 2010 at 6:16 am
delilahsky PLATINUM, Arlington, Massachusetts
28 articles 3 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
Just because her eyes don't tear doesn't mean her heart doesn't cry. And just because she comes off strong, doesn't mean there's nothing wrong






-Author Unknown

I love this one, too. Seriously, you are very talented.

on Feb. 19 2010 at 5:52 pm
tearingheart SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
6 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's not about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

Both of your pieces are amazing. keep writing

on Feb. 3 2010 at 8:30 pm
THEskaMuFFin BRONZE, Berthoud, Colorado
2 articles 2 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Desire is the cause for all your sickness and misery"
"When you realize how perfect everything is, you will tilt your head back and laugh at the sky."
—Budha

Again, your poems are amazing. Definately asthetic moment inducing. Post it!

on Jan. 4 2010 at 3:04 pm
bamboom212 PLATINUM, Chestnut Ridge, New York
23 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The truth with a bad intent, is worse than any lie you can ever invent."
"You are smarter than you think. You are stronger than you look. You are braver than you feel."

ive read em both 2. u really hav awesome talent. i luv this. plz keep writing! :P

on Jan. 4 2010 at 1:45 pm
LolCatzMcGee PLATINUM, London, Hawaii
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i've read both of your poems and they're both friggin amazing! really talented, keep going.

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on Jan. 4 2010 at 8:07 am
jimmy_a GOLD, Sanford, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Look for me, not with a flashlight but open your heart n free your soul n there my love i shall be

really great poem u have amazing talent

on Oct. 17 2009 at 2:19 pm
Actresspoet123, Anchorage, Alaska
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Wow, this is an amazing poem! Great discriptions, the meaning of this poem is easy to understand, keep writing!


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