Look at me

February 21, 2009
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As i stand up tall
looking down at all
standing high
with my head in the sky
the chill of cold
just as the weather man told
forgetting everything left behind
afraid for what i might find
as I'm standing here
showing nothing but fear
save me from what I've become
cause you shine brighter than any sun

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Shahed said...
Mar. 5, 2010 at 8:05 pm
Very nice!
PoetLaureate07 said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 9:56 am
It's pretty cool.... like amanda727 said.... you aint gotta rhyme.... detail is good also!! But it's pretty... keep writing
***3Lli3*** replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 9:10 pm
THANKS.! :) do u write a lot.?
PoetLaureate07 replied...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 8:53 am
Yeah... A whole bunch... I have prolly 7 right now on the website, but i have prolly that many more pending approval... What about you??
***3Lli3*** replied...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 12:16 pm
i have like 25+ lol and a lot more i needa enter
amanda727 said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 3:07 pm
I like this one. um... another thing to notice though? You talk about fear and other emotions....go into detail. If you don't rhyme necessarily, you'll be able to express and describe the pain you feel with more description. Try that and see how it works :) i like it though!
***3Lli3*** replied...
Jan. 20, 2010 at 8:45 pm
yeah thats what i noticed lol thanks a lot for the tips it really does help.! :)
And what did u interview for.?
amanda727 replied...
Jan. 21, 2010 at 12:21 pm
lol no problem :)
And Rue21 idk if you've heard of it.
***3Lli3*** replied...
Jan. 22, 2010 at 5:28 pm
NO i havent lol. what is it.?
LittlePoemWriter said...
Jan. 16, 2010 at 10:37 pm
omg i loved it!! =]
***3Lli3*** replied...
Jan. 17, 2010 at 8:00 pm
thanks :) check out some of my other ones tell me how u like them :)
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