Look at me

February 21, 2009
By Ellie.M. PLATINUM, Santa Paula, California
Ellie.M. PLATINUM, Santa Paula, California
47 articles 1 photo 133 comments

As i stand up tall
looking down at all
standing high
with my head in the sky
the chill of cold
just as the weather man told
forgetting everything left behind
afraid for what i might find
as I'm standing here
showing nothing but fear
save me from what I've become
cause you shine brighter than any sun


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Shahed GOLD said...
on Mar. 5 2010 at 8:05 pm
Shahed GOLD, Tulsa, Oklahoma
16 articles 2 photos 350 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People are like tea bags, they don't realize their own strength until they're dropped in hot water "
“People are often unreasonable and self-centered. Forgive them anyway.
If you are kind, people may accuse you of ulterior motives. Be kind anyway."

Very nice!

on Feb. 24 2010 at 12:16 pm
Ellie.M. PLATINUM, Santa Paula, California
47 articles 1 photo 133 comments
i have like 25+ lol and a lot more i needa enter

on Feb. 24 2010 at 8:53 am
PoetLaureate07 PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Mississippi
32 articles 0 photos 246 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing..

Yeah... A whole bunch... I have prolly 7 right now on the website, but i have prolly that many more pending approval... What about you??

on Feb. 23 2010 at 9:10 pm
Ellie.M. PLATINUM, Santa Paula, California
47 articles 1 photo 133 comments
THANKS.! :) do u write a lot.?

on Feb. 23 2010 at 9:56 am
PoetLaureate07 PLATINUM, Aberdeen, Mississippi
32 articles 0 photos 246 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to risk not being loved in return. To hope is to risk pain. To try is to risk failure, but the greatest hazard in life is to risk nothing..

It's pretty cool.... like amanda727 said.... you aint gotta rhyme.... detail is good also!! But it's pretty... keep writing

on Jan. 22 2010 at 5:28 pm
Ellie.M. PLATINUM, Santa Paula, California
47 articles 1 photo 133 comments
NO i havent lol. what is it.?

on Jan. 21 2010 at 12:21 pm
amanda727 PLATINUM, Salt Lake City, Utah
33 articles 2 photos 245 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't let anybody tell you who you are; don't let anyone tell you that you don't deserve what you're willing to work for.
Never give up; you\'ll never know how far you could go until you try to get to where you want to go.

lol no problem :)

And Rue21 idk if you've heard of it.

on Jan. 20 2010 at 8:45 pm
Ellie.M. PLATINUM, Santa Paula, California
47 articles 1 photo 133 comments
yeah thats what i noticed lol thanks a lot for the tips it really does help.! :)

And what did u interview for.?

on Jan. 19 2010 at 3:07 pm
amanda727 PLATINUM, Salt Lake City, Utah
33 articles 2 photos 245 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't let anybody tell you who you are; don't let anyone tell you that you don't deserve what you're willing to work for.
Never give up; you\'ll never know how far you could go until you try to get to where you want to go.

I like this one. um... another thing to notice though? You talk about fear and other emotions....go into detail. If you don't rhyme necessarily, you'll be able to express and describe the pain you feel with more description. Try that and see how it works :) i like it though!

on Jan. 17 2010 at 8:00 pm
Ellie.M. PLATINUM, Santa Paula, California
47 articles 1 photo 133 comments
thanks :) check out some of my other ones tell me how u like them :)

on Jan. 16 2010 at 10:37 pm
LittlePoemWriter SILVER, Little Chute, Wisconsin
5 articles 0 photos 4 comments
omg i loved it!! =]


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