Yesterday's Tomorrow

February 21, 2009
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i'm here to see another day
to save another life
to fix all that's broken
never say goodbye
i try and try
and never win
but i know that today is the day
that i will succeed
i will win
you will be proud
and everything will go on about
it's like nothing ever happened
that it was all make believe
it's all right in front of you
why can't you see
close your mind
open your heart
and then, then you will see

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iliketac0s said...
Apr. 11, 2010 at 4:00 pm
i really like it!
freedomfighter97 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 11, 2010 at 9:40 pm
Very lovely!  I like the line "and everything will go on."  Add more flavorful words for a more vivid word picture in the reader's mind.  Other than that, great!
thetiedyecrayon said...
Apr. 11, 2010 at 8:20 am
I loved every bit of it except from "but i know that today is the day" to "and everything will go on about". Probably because those lines seemed more uplifting. Lol, I just love the saddest poems. Just wondering, do you have to be over thirteen to get an account/submit work/get the magazine? If you do, I don't think you have to be thirteen to appreciate good literature. Who agrees?
Claire_Milan said...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 3:14 pm
This poem was very inspirational. I simply LOVED it. I think you should most definitely keep writing. It makes me want to read the rest of your work.
Ellie:) replied...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 9:35 pm
aww thanks :) hahah what type of writing do u like best.?
lovevball said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 8:41 pm
This is absolutely amazing!! i really really like it! Could you look at my poem "i am the dawn of the universe" and tell me what you think o if there is anything i could do to improve. :)
lovevball replied...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 8:42 pm
I mean what you think of it or if there is anything i can do to improve*
***3Lli3*** replied...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 1:49 pm
Thanks yeah ill be sure of it :) What do u think is so great about this one.?
***3Lli3*** replied...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 1:50 pm
i went to check it out and there aren't any writings if u just submitted it, it takes like 2 weeks for them to accept it
lovevball replied...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 3:12 pm
oh.. it said that it was posted and other people have already read it and rated it.. how did you try to find it? because if you just click on my name then it should be there..
in this poem, i just really like how it ends, and just the whole thing is a really great message for life. :)
PoetLaureate07 replied...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 9:00 am
It does take forever for them to accept!!!! I have to agree on that one!!! lol
***3Lli3*** replied...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 12:15 pm
Yeah it can be annoying lol. i used to check everyday to see if they had been posted
lovevball replied...
Feb. 25, 2010 at 4:54 pm
yeah well like i said it told me that it was already accepted. and when i go to my works it tells me that people have rated it and viewed it. i will copy and paste the link so you can see it.
lovevball replied...
Feb. 25, 2010 at 4:55 pm
http ://teenink .com /poetry/free_verse/article/177425/I-Am-the-Dawn-of-the-Universe/
lovevball replied...
Feb. 25, 2010 at 4:56 pm
here it is : http ://teenink .com /poetry/free_verse/article/177425/I-Am-the-Dawn-of-the-Universe/
***3Lli3*** replied...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 2:38 pm
Oh okay.. How many views do u have on your most viewed poem.?
lovevball replied...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 8:28 pm
i think 10. or something like that
lovevball replied...
Feb. 26, 2010 at 8:28 pm
the website link never got posted :((
lovevball replied...
Feb. 28, 2010 at 9:23 pm
i got an e-mail that you responded to this, but i accidentally deleted the message before i got to read what you wrote. so what was it? Sorry
Ellie:) replied...
Mar. 1, 2010 at 2:35 pm
i dnt remember sorry
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