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You told me you were moving
to a place far away, I acted like I didn't care but what I didn't say, is that it is your eyes that take my fear away. You shrugged when I asked you why, laughed because I was scared, but when everything is nothing remember who still cared.



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Kaygirl said...
Feb. 22, 2009 at 5:49 pm
Thanx for people who are commenting I need feedback to know if I should persue poetry or not.

*Kaylee*
 
carolyn G. said...
Feb. 21, 2009 at 2:47 pm
It rhymes but you need to seperate it into lines. Its short and doesn't have an evident rhyme scheme. I would give it...a 6/10.
 
hiddenwithinthedark said...
Feb. 17, 2009 at 2:48 pm
I love it kaylee ~ J.R ~
 
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