Traveler

Amazing imagery! The diction and word choice was great. the contrast between soft and sharp words were so intriguing

Great job! It gave good descriptive words as well as metaphors. However I didnt really get what you were trying to tell the reader.

This is wonderful. I love the metaphors and the textures and the adventure.

Fantastic descriptions here. It kinds of feel... like you are going to tell me something and never say it; but the way you paint a picture with your words are worth the open (or never there) ending.

Continue Writing =]

the symbolism was nice but... what were you even trying to tell me, as the reader? i got no definative voice/emotion from this.

It's a great poem, with amazing descriptions, I would've liked a more satisfying ending

good imagery, even if it was morbid... did you not enjoy the trip? read some of mine?

You paint great pictures with your words, keep it up!

wow. this is really good.

this is nothing but pure inspiration for me....
Not the Words, but the content...
I mean...nature is the shiyza..

Short, sweet, but really makes an impact. Awesome.

wonderful descriptions that really pack a punch.

so much truth. sometimes its hard to write the truth, but you never know who needs that truth and how much it helps ppl. thnx

The eerie description of the Earth as a famished, sickening body ("prairie's belly/swollen with disease") is bold and effective...and the juxtaposition of the traveler is a fascinating relationship...

Lovely. :)

This is fantastic! I've been to the grand canyon, the way you descibe it makes such a vivid mental picture....
Great job!

This poem had great description. I felt like I was standing at the end of the Grand Canyon looking at how it cuves like a turtle's shell. When you say " and then across the soft bulge of the prairie's belly" I think of it as how beep and long the canyon is. You also state "cracks on the massive skull of the dessert" the canyon being a massive skull from long ago with so much history to it. I relate to this poem so well because i have traveled to the Grand Canyon and... (more »)

This was VERY inspiring to me! I loved it! I loved how you used body parts: Skull belly incisors spine turtles shell... LOVED IT! Very good comparison! Good luck with furthur writing!

Beautifully simple. Love it.

great job.i really liked your poem, i hope u become a real good poet,

wow cool i liked it cause i have been like that

interesting

Beautiful.

Good.:)

:)

Alex!!! Congrats on the publication. Heather's probably hoping you'll be the next Yaul.
-Jess

Wow this is good. I really like the imagery.

I love your description of what you wrote. I feel like im there and can feel and see everything that you are describing. It was perfect. Keep up the great work, and congrats on being published in the magazine, you deserve it... :)
♥ Jackie

WHERES THE ENDING MARK??!! LOL JK I LOVE IT SOO MUCH BUT I WOULD NOT WANT TO TRAVAL THAT FAR IM TOO LAZY!! LOL JK

its really good, I hope to hear from you soon...

You picked the right title. Thepoem has definitely got the element of exploration! I hope to travel someday...