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a little child
a big deal
fairy tails
becoming real
a soft little blanket
and red little cheeks
a from that little blanket
little eyes peek
little nose
and little life

little fingers
and little toes
happiness, joy
and little woes
love that reaches
beyond compare
joy thats spreading
every where
a little body
and little soul
a new born life
is here tonight




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inkblot13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 21, 2011 at 8:26 pm:

I've read almost all of your poems and this one is my favorite so far. It was just so cute, I loved it so much. Great job! :D

(PS- could you check out some of my stuff??)

 
jesus_savesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 28, 2011 at 8:48 pm :
would love too!!! Glad you like them.
 
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HBCdance This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 6, 2009 at 8:37 pm:
I absolutely LOVED it! I really like the way you wrote about the baby, and your repitition of the world "little".

You're rhythm was really really good, except on a couple of lines:

a from that little blanket: i'm guessing the "a" is and. i think u should cut a/and out, and just have from that little blanket, so that the number of syllables in that line fits with the rest of the poem.

Other than that TEENIE TINY little thing, the poem is pretty much pe... (more »)
 
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