Once Upon A Time

January 29, 2009
By jonasfan1 SILVER, Platteville, Colorado
jonasfan1 SILVER, Platteville, Colorado
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Once Upon a Time

Once upon a time
Once upon a time

my daddy tucks me in
reading me a story
i fell asleap

two am
the house shakes
i lay in my bed
holding my book
daddy came in
he held me tight
I love you darling

he left

a crash of silence
i never got out of be
holding my book
waiting
waiting
for my daddy to come back

he never did

i sit there waiting
for my once upon a time to happen again


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on Mar. 24 2009 at 6:42 pm
jonasfan1 SILVER, Platteville, Colorado
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Thank you

on Mar. 3 2009 at 5:35 pm
Gabriela Rivera BRONZE, Plattevill, Colorado
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I think it was great you have the reader in your hand GREAT JOB

on Feb. 17 2009 at 4:12 pm
jonasfan1 SILVER, Platteville, Colorado
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As I was reading this poem, i realized that i meant to say "bed" in line sixteen.

mileyfan1 said...
on Feb. 17 2009 at 4:08 pm
I loved it. You are right though about the not pulling the reader in. It's a sad poem!

on Feb. 14 2009 at 5:52 pm
kaceyyy?!?! BRONZE, Allen, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"In this world of hate there has to be a light Be that light and spread some love Maybe this day the youth can make a difference, No more hate!" - Christofer Drew

.....yah i dont really get it

well, i get it but its lacking the stuff to pull in the reader

i like it though

kodaluv said...
on Feb. 13 2009 at 8:14 pm
wow dude thats sad!!!!! major depressing!!!

LinzyLove said...
on Feb. 13 2009 at 8:12 pm
wow. love it, nice job




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