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In the beginning of the song

When it was slow

I still danced along

I went with the flow

The drumbeats that I heard later

Made me go faster

The song got even better

Like a growing aster

I tapped my feet to the beat

My hands moving along

The music that my ears would eat

My mind drenched with the song

I took two steps forward

And then spinned around

By the rhythm I was showered

Enchanted by the sound

Silence is my foe

And music, my friend

I danced till the dawn 

I danced till the end






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HammadWaseemThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sept. 13, 2015 at 10:19 am
Thats beautiful! @Sunshine2420 will you rate and comment on my teen ink video work named,"The Unbeatable Breakdancer"?
 
Sunshine2420 replied...
Sept. 17, 2015 at 8:19 am
Sure and thanks for the comment :)
 
Hanban12 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 22, 2015 at 4:35 pm
Congrats getting the Editor's Choice! I really like the concept of this poem, as well as the way you got the inspiration for it. I feel like the rhyme scheme made the poem flow well, but my favorite part was definitely the last few lines. Keep writing :)
 
Sunshine2420 replied...
Jun. 22, 2015 at 11:45 pm
I'm glad you liked you...thank you!
 
Sunshine2420 replied...
Sept. 17, 2015 at 8:18 am
I meant *it lol
 
Camomile_Addison said...
Jun. 22, 2015 at 2:47 pm
Fantastic job!
 
Sunshine2420 replied...
Jun. 22, 2015 at 11:46 pm
Thanks a lot :) I appreciate it.
 
Adia16 said...
Jun. 22, 2015 at 12:05 pm
Your Amazing! Great job! If I may offer a tip, your writing is so amazing the wording is exceptional. Except the line "The drum beats that I heard later." Maybe reword this so it doesn't stick out as much.
 
Sunshine2420 replied...
Jun. 22, 2015 at 12:07 pm
Thank you for your suggestion...well, I really agree :)
 
HayatC. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 22, 2015 at 12:01 pm
This is a great piece that could be interpreted in a lot of different ways, I can see why it got Editor's Pick. Great writing!
 
Sunshine2420 replied...
Jun. 22, 2015 at 12:09 pm
Thank you so so sooo much :)
 
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