Rain

January 4, 2009
By awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground"
~Theordore Roosevelt


Rain
A substance hard to describe.
You cannot scent a candle like it.
Nor can grasp it in your hand and feel it.
Slapping the ground like it has something to be mad about.
Smacking umbrellas like their in it's way.
Smell like new refrigerator,
And touch like liquid silk.
Sound like a million, tiny elephants running across a palm.



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iwriter42 GOLD said...
on Jan. 2 2011 at 7:07 pm
iwriter42 GOLD, Ballwin, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is not about waiting for storms to pass... it's about learning how to dance in the rain."
-Anonymous

now i'm going to think about your poem every time it rains!!  great job

on Nov. 2 2010 at 6:40 pm
ideaspazz BRONZE, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
There may already be a billion-trillion stars in the sky, but one can always shine brighter than another...

--Grace B.

I thought the candle scenting part was beautiful.  I'd never thought of it this way.  :) Great job and love all your other writing. 

*IZZI*


on Jan. 7 2010 at 4:57 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Wonderful. I love it.

Holmes SILVER said...
on Nov. 18 2009 at 2:04 pm
Holmes SILVER, Olathe, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
"It's only when we've lost everything that we're free to do anything."- Fight Club

Not bad ata all. You SHOULD be proud of it. Really good. ;)

on Nov. 17 2009 at 3:03 pm
awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 176 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground"
~Theordore Roosevelt

Thanks so much for all of the comments! I wrote this long time ago so I think I could have made it better, but as it was my first article on teenink, It's probably the one I'm proudest of. :) look forward to reading work from all of you! ~sofia~

on Nov. 17 2009 at 1:00 pm
JesusFreak20 BRONZE, Conyers, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
If i had to choose between loving you and breathing, i would use my last breath to say: "I love you."

You sure have elucidate your gist about that soothing substance, I felt encrusted with those sprinting elephants as I read this one. Extravagant poem =]

on Nov. 15 2009 at 10:39 am
francheeze88 SILVER, Oak Park, Illinois
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Yeah, I really like this one.

Zero_K DIAMOND said...
on Nov. 12 2009 at 4:13 pm
Zero_K DIAMOND, Moosic, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's no fun if you're not insane, otherwise you grow up to be an accountant." -Moi

I love rain! I especially like the smell after it rains, so fresh. Great poem!

-Blessed Be!

+++ZERO+++

on Nov. 12 2009 at 2:42 pm
AbbotRabbit GOLD, Abolana, District Of Columbia
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Favorite Quote:
This poem has great flow and insight.
I really enjoyed it.
Lovely poem darling =]
-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-
XxIll tell you Im an orphan after you meet myy familyXx

This poem has great flow and insight.

I really enjoyed it.

Lovely poem darling =]

-Please check out the works that I have posted on here it would be highly appreciated and I think you would greatly enjoy them, Thankk youz-

XxThe Whole Time You Were Talking I Didnt Hear A Single Word You Said B/C Th3 Whole Time You Were Talking I Was Picturing You DeadXx

kpf1991 said...
on Nov. 11 2009 at 10:09 pm
kpf1991, East Hanover, New Jersey
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Hey could you check out "anguish" or "They see through me" and rate it or just let know what you think? you have great talent and i'd really appreciate your input

on Nov. 11 2009 at 9:04 pm
literaryaddict PLATINUM, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"We're almost there and no where near it. All that matters is that we're going." Lorelai Gilmore, Gilmore Girls
"The whole theory of modern education is radically unsound." Lady Bracknell, The Importance of Being Earnest, Oscar Wilde

i really really like your poem. it brings a new perspective to rain. check out my poem "rain and hope"

on Nov. 11 2009 at 6:17 pm
Annabelle7614, Nunyabusiness, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
This is my favorite personal quote.

I like the flow of this poem, it's, well, poetic!

Please read my article and rate and comment. It's called perfect rain, so it's alot like this one, except it's not a poem. : )

Sar27 SILVER said...
on Nov. 11 2009 at 4:57 pm
Sar27 SILVER, Saint Charles, Illinois
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tiny elephants! what a new simile i've never heard. common things like rain are difficult to write about because so many people do, but you made it different!

ihunt BRONZE said...
on Nov. 11 2009 at 1:50 pm
ihunt BRONZE, Dell Rapids, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
friendly fire isnt

b-e-a-utiful ha

on Nov. 11 2009 at 1:46 pm
cheeseNrice BRONZE, Dell Rapids, South Dakota
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I liked this poem. I liked how it made you think of such a simple concept as rain a little deeper.

Dilated Eyes said...
on Nov. 10 2009 at 6:58 pm
I recommend that you listen to Enya "It's in the rain." Wonderful that you take the rare moments out of life and look at them. Good luck, love.

on May. 16 2009 at 9:13 pm
awesomeaugust GOLD, Boston, Massachusetts
10 articles 0 photos 176 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Keep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground"
~Theordore Roosevelt

I'd love comments if you have any


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