Overwhelmed

January 8, 2009
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Too many nights
Of lonesome depression
Have etched the new lines upon my face
I surrender to my heart

I surrender to the pain
That is all I must give in to
For it is all that my soul holds
I cannot escape to see you

I surrender to my dignity
It is obvious it’s taken over
Not a speck of rebel left in me
There was nothing to gain

No sense can be made
from this jumble of hurt
All I hear is I surrender
A white flag, swaying pompously in the wind.





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Maggie Abeles said...
Jan. 18, 2009 at 8:30 am
HOLY CRAP LAURA

that is so good !

if i could write like that id...

idk wat id do but ur sooo good ! lol



xoxo

<3
 
giovanni said...
Jan. 18, 2009 at 2:17 am
laura i love it!
you're so talented, keep writing!
 
Matt ;) said...
Jan. 16, 2009 at 12:58 pm
LAURA!
I never knew you were a writer! This is the best poem id' ever seen a student wrote.
KEEP IT UP! Fingers crossed for it to be published in a magazine !!!!
 
Stunnerquat said...
Jan. 15, 2009 at 1:19 pm
well done but its a little depressing if u continue to produce depressing work you'll end up as Edgar Allan Poe (The Famous Poet that was tortured for all his sins) If you choose the remain a sad sack then i guaranty you'll be as good Edgar Allan Poe but if you become more cheerful, you have good potentials, you can be almost as good as William Shakespeare lighten up dude
 
joe123joe said...
Jan. 15, 2009 at 1:11 pm
WOW! good job laura, u r so amazing! Tis really means alot to me. i think u should for sure get tis published.
 
MYNAMEISJONAS said...
Jan. 15, 2009 at 11:30 am
omg this was so good! keep it up!! omg!
 
ldcthemet said...
Jan. 15, 2009 at 3:24 pm
I think it shows a profound sense of compassion and the understanding of human suffering. What is the experience that influenced this poetic expression?

Keep writing. You have much to share.
 
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