where did the music go?

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As I walked down the street
with a beat in my feet
i heard nothing but the bass beat thump
i couldn't hear the birds
or the wind
or the creaky swing across the park

just me....
and my music....

i didn't hear the breaking glass behind me
as a car crashed and twisted around the phone pole
i didn't hear the ambulance, nor the police cars

it was just me...
and my music

the sound flooding my mind with senseless words that can be filled with
hate
anger
aggression
just pouring out of some overplayed artists mouth abba abaa they're all just rhyme schemes
twisting and encircling each other to make the perfect harmony or the worst melody influencing people everyday to do... well to do what they do but right now that doesn't matter cause....
it's just me....
and my music.





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Aiga M. said...
Feb. 15, 2009 at 3:42 am
agree with the above it would make a pretty good song:]]
i enjoyed reading it and can relate to it.
music is the perfect escape from the world.
 
RGallagher said...
Jan. 19, 2009 at 3:30 pm
I like this poem, though it still needs work. You need punctuation for one. It will make the piece flow better. Second, you need capitalization. Capitalize the letter I, it should always be capitalized unless not having it capitalized adds to the meaning of the poem. It seems to detract from it in this case. ABBA and ABAA need to be capitalized too. It's a really good poem though, all it needs is some stylistic work and it'll be even better.
 
shelbyshazam said...
Jan. 18, 2009 at 3:14 pm
i love this, the first stanza could totally be made into a song.
fantastic job.
 
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