Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments

See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?



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on Mar. 19 2009 at 10:58 pm
blubryblsm501, Metuchen, New Jersey
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Are my requirements unachievable?

a little. men dont know hwo to love women like women knwo how to love men..its nto in their hearts like women. its proven but its sad and you can still have hope to find a respectable man.

on Mar. 19 2009 at 6:02 am
MaKayla Austin, Haworth, Oklahoma
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That is AWESOME!!! That is how i feel everyday of my life i still am not sure it is out there 4 me but i really hope so... u r an amazing writer !!!

on Mar. 19 2009 at 12:55 am
Sabesque BRONZE, Marietta, Georgia
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That was an amazing poem. I really enjoyed it.

MMM__ BRONZE said...
on Mar. 18 2009 at 8:14 pm
MMM__ BRONZE, Parlin, New Jersey
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I love the message it sends across, but I'm not sure if I like this as a poem. To me, poetry is more of the traditional rhymes and stanzas. But, as poetry is all about the message - I'd like to thank you for sending a great one! Good job!

on Mar. 18 2009 at 1:15 am
Allaboutlyf BRONZE, Hollis, New York
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You know a lot of us don't realize how much we can relate to that poem.hink there is someone out there for everyone. Call me crazy.Anyways, Awesome job! You are a great poet!

carijoy SILVER said...
on Mar. 17 2009 at 6:50 am
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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Thank you all for your such sweet comments! I really appreciate it! I actually had time to write another one and it's up now! Called "Letting Go" you should check it out. :)

Whatwehavelost: Yes! You may use it! I am so flattered! :)

Once again, thank you all!

Carolyn S.

on Mar. 16 2009 at 5:36 pm
lena_monrose BRONZE, Norwalk, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
the onyl way out is through

I can definietly relate

great poem :) keep writing you're really good. See mine if you get a chance. thanks

on Mar. 15 2009 at 11:46 pm
project827 GOLD, Portage, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Real Revolution Starts At Learning, If You're Not Angry, Then You Are Not Paying Attention" - Tim McIlrath

i can so relate to this. but thankfully i found what i was looking for. once you find it, love is the best thing you'll ever experience, so keep searching.

gcxox3 said...
on Mar. 15 2009 at 3:49 pm
This poem pretty much sums up my love life. Completely amazing. Write more. You are very talented. :D

on Mar. 14 2009 at 10:12 pm
dang that is beyond true i get all. hey um i really like your poem and was wondering if i could use it in a folder im putting together for me and a group of friends thanks for writing this its beyond good

Erin_A SILVER said...
on Mar. 14 2009 at 4:45 pm
Erin_A SILVER, Coral Springs, Florida
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Epic. And mad deep. End of story.

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on Mar. 14 2009 at 2:10 pm
Bianca GOLD, New York, New York
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ok i dont really comment a lot but this poem deserves it...this poem is way better then most of the poems they actually put in the magazine...keep writing you're really good

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on Mar. 13 2009 at 7:45 pm
lilly BRONZE, Burleson, Texas
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I Like your proem Its really good. keep on the good work!!!

crazy 210 said...
on Mar. 13 2009 at 5:46 pm
I LOVED YOUR POEM! KEEP WRITTING!!

on Mar. 12 2009 at 10:21 pm
xxlaurenxx BRONZE, Liberty, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Smile. Less questions asked.

great writing! I know exactly how you feel. I can relate to this like you can't believe. I love it keep writing

on Mar. 9 2009 at 9:23 am
Smokey_Jay SILVER, Collins, New York
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that was such a good poem. you really put a lot of heart into it which is the way poems need to be more often. good job and keep writing!

on Mar. 7 2009 at 5:04 pm
Ellie.M. PLATINUM, Santa Paula, California
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hey i really like your poems they are really tight you should try and check out mine they are like the same kind of material thanks

on Mar. 7 2009 at 4:27 pm
Poetrywritter BRONZE, Seneca, South Carolina
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this is really good.

on Mar. 7 2009 at 3:12 pm
Very good :)

I usually don't care for poetry but I really like this one.

decouvrir GOLD said...
on Mar. 7 2009 at 12:13 am
decouvrir GOLD, Cedar Park, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
“Music is a total constant. That's why we have such a strong visceral connection to it, you know? Because a song can take you back instantly to a moment, or a place, or even a person. No matter what else has changed in your or the world, that one song says the same, just like that moment.” -Sarah Dessen

This is a really good poem!!! You did a great job!!


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