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See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?




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Lauren T. said...
Mar. 12, 2009 at 10:21 pm:
great writing! I know exactly how you feel. I can relate to this like you can't believe. I love it keep writing
 
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oruga101 said...
Feb. 25, 2009 at 11:51 am:
Aww. : (
That was sad. It really can be hard not having someone to love, but the longer you have to wait, the more you'll appreciate that first person : )

If you don't mind, please go read, rate, and comment on my poem. Please!

TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/85804/Divine-Vine/
 
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themanmoran11 said...
Feb. 25, 2009 at 12:57 am:
amazing, i love it all i have to say is wow don't stop writing
 
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Tonks said...
Feb. 24, 2009 at 11:09 pm:
That sense of yearning for love is something that I think everyone can relate too, especially me. Its beautiful, keep writing, I love your work and this is the first I have read.
 
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YouCanCallMeSarah said...
Feb. 24, 2009 at 12:17 am:
You live in Marblehead?!
-dies-
I love that town <3
 
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MissHello said...
Feb. 23, 2009 at 3:52 pm:
the poem-Just beautiful. A poem that almost everyone can relate to.
you- be patient. A wonderful girl with such great talent won't be waiting for long.
 
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poetess said...
Feb. 21, 2009 at 2:12 am:
that was a really good poem.
hey everyone! Please check out my work:
TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/81573/When-the-Cards-Were-Dealt/

TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/81568/Cure/

And please do rate it and comment. I am struggling with some self-esteem issues, and i would really like some feedback. Negative or positive, all is welcome! Thanks.
 
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Leah:) said...
Feb. 20, 2009 at 9:50 pm:
I think just about EVERY teen can relate to this! Keep writing:)
 
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artofthedeath said...
Feb. 20, 2009 at 1:00 pm:
I thought it was good, and I can relate. Thought that for most of my life, still do. Great job!
 
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jess said...
Feb. 20, 2009 at 3:48 am:
this poem was amazing, great job. i liked the use of wording and how it all flowed together.
 
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Perfectionist47 said...
Feb. 17, 2009 at 1:22 am:
I thought it was a lot to take in, but I loved it. It's hard to write about such a broad, changing subject. I hope you check out my poem at-
TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/83793/To-Become/
Please read and comment on it! Keep Writing!
 
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Kitty K. said...
Feb. 15, 2009 at 3:30 am:
Awezome poem i really like i havent found love
 
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Carolyn S. said...
Feb. 16, 2009 at 9:44 pm:
Thank you all for your comments, tips, and advice. I hope you could relate to or at least enjoy my poem. :) I do write songs as well, and I do plan to write more poems, but I am busy with life right now.

A reply to Art Close: Even though my poem is both blank verse and free verse, it has a point to it. It lacks structure, as does love and life. At the points where it does rhyme, there is a reason for it. I did not just scrawl it out on a piece of paper, there is a lot of thought put... (more »)
 
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morgan R. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 15, 2009 at 6:51 pm:
good job, although it is strait forward, this poem is written extremely well in down-to-earth, very real feelings of the average teenage girl, including me. once again, very well done.
 
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ryryross23 said...
Feb. 15, 2009 at 6:46 pm:
that was amazing, it is like the story of my life
 
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Mychiana B. said...
Feb. 16, 2009 at 7:54 am:
Amazing Poem
 
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Art Close said...
Feb. 16, 2009 at 5:34 am:
Where was the flow or the dreamy prose? The idea was good, but the execution wasnt great. But I did have a very clear vision of you writing this, hunched over the paper, scrawling your heart away onto a piece of refill... if you could take that gift of placement and spin some words, it would be exsquisite. Best wishes.
 
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smile101 said...
Feb. 11, 2009 at 4:05 am:
Wow that poem was really good! And what 'un-lovable' girl doesn't feel that way?
 
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jaquanda sunshine said...
Feb. 12, 2009 at 7:16 pm:
thatz really great i enjoyed it
 
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Michael G. said...
Feb. 16, 2009 at 10:55 pm:
In my opinion, the poem could have been better. Though the image was very vivid, i thought it lacked a big enough deeper meaning. If you had maybe mad it longer, and added almost a second poem, like another idea, not superficially, but something that the reader would, after thinking about it, come upon a bigger idea (though love is a very big idea, which i applaud you for writing about). All in all though, great writing.
 
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