Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?



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on Apr. 26 2009 at 5:33 pm
KICK3593 PLATINUM, Roslyn Heights, New York
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It seems you've written a plausible poem about perspective.



I think the main problem with the middle and end of this kpoem is that you haven't detached from the reality. You cannot necessarily try to relate to someone in a poem through direct things; it's got to be done through the senses.

goaly said...
on Apr. 25 2009 at 5:05 am
goaly, Sherman Oaks, California
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its sounds like the person in the poem is ethier ugly or mad with the world

on Apr. 24 2009 at 12:51 am
that was ammaaaazing!

on Apr. 23 2009 at 9:46 pm
hey_itskatelyn PLATINUM, Willis, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
“God, of your goodness, give me yourself; you are enough for me, and anything less that I could ask for would not do you full honour. And if I ask anything that is less, I shall always lack something, but in you alone I have everything”

AMAZING!

Check out iLove by Katelyn H. It has a lot of the same emotions. Super cool=)

on Apr. 23 2009 at 7:42 pm
HeavenCooley GOLD, Stillwater, Oklahoma
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i really like this poem good job keep it up!!!

:)

on Apr. 23 2009 at 1:06 am
Miss.Super-Hyperactive BRONZE, Willow Springs, North Carolina
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it's insane how so many people(including me) can relate to this poem. Please continue writing you have a gift.

iiiiiij said...
on Apr. 23 2009 at 12:46 am
iiiiiij, Miami, Florida
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This poem is pretty good I believe. There's just something it's missing though. I'm not exactly sure what it is but I know I'm going through the same thing. Yet, there's this aspect, like a spark, that's missing. It just doesn't get to me like it does to everyone else...

JessicaE said...
on Apr. 22 2009 at 4:29 pm
JessicaE, Dawsonville, Georgia
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Amazing. It is like looking into my own mirror.

on Apr. 21 2009 at 10:34 pm
tigeress3 PLATINUM, Dayton, Ohio
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Totally true! Keep up the good work!

on Apr. 21 2009 at 12:56 pm
Sarah Dehays BRONZE, Amman, Other
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You can't believe how much i can relate to your poem. It is exactly what is on my mind. I love it, its amazing and true, good to know im not the only one feeling that way. Your doing an awesome job, Keep writing:):)

on Apr. 19 2009 at 1:46 pm
sweetness1994 GOLD, Berea, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"What goes around comes around"

"Love me or hate me....Either was your thinking of me"

these remind me of my poems,*him..." and "her...."

i really liked this one!!

Mikal SILVER said...
on Apr. 18 2009 at 6:30 am
Mikal SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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Ceck out my poems:Living my own life, I need you to be in my life

Shawna said...
on Apr. 17 2009 at 5:22 pm
Shawna, Fremont, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
"Every man dies. Not every man really lives." My great great so many great Uncle William Wallace

OH this is so wonderful, very creative I loved reading it, you keep working on these poems they are very amazeing

on Apr. 17 2009 at 6:27 am
Lindsey Goldin BRONZE, Voorhees, New Jersey
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Great poem, I loved it!

on Apr. 17 2009 at 1:51 am
Not_year_but_Forever SILVER, Belleville, Illinois
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this is brilliant to me more poems on love should be based on love like time before you should read my poems

Big O said...
on Apr. 16 2009 at 6:48 pm
yeah i really digged this poem.......its deep. people can be Diagnosed with love and to cure it you need that person to cure your love.........=)

Joyce said...
on Apr. 16 2009 at 1:36 am
Yeah! I loved it.

on Apr. 15 2009 at 8:47 pm
ravenwing92 DIAMOND, Eastlake, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Way too many. I have a quotebook on facebook in my notes. It contains quotes from the Bible, myself, and others. ^_^

I TOTALLY RELATE TO YOU! This is exactly how I feel, almost everyday.

'Tis a very excellent poem of truth. Keep the creativity flowing! =)

Devo91 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 15 2009 at 7:18 pm
Devo91 BRONZE, Greentown, Pennsylvania
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Wow You Have Some Real Talent =]

on Apr. 15 2009 at 6:54 pm
_broken_heart_ BRONZE, Cincinnati, Ohio
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I love your poems! All of them actually, your an inspirtion to me.


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