Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments

See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?



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on May. 8 2009 at 3:03 am
kaura123 SILVER, Huntington Beach, California
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thats really good.

ivette BRONZE said...
on May. 8 2009 at 2:33 am
ivette BRONZE, Phelan, California
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really good, keep up the good work! :)

Batwoman GOLD said...
on May. 7 2009 at 11:53 pm
Batwoman GOLD, Middlebury, Indiana
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I know exactly how you feel. I've been shot down by like every guy I've ever liked and it's hard. But I always get back up and try again even when I feel unlovable. So thanks for sharing something that hits so close to home for me and probably a lot of other people.

Diesel SILVER said...
on May. 7 2009 at 7:02 pm
Diesel SILVER, West Hartford, Connecticut
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This is really good, although the first sentence is a little cliche for my taste. It shows teen angst at its greatest. Very well written, nice use of free verse that jerks your emotions. Keep on writing.

Care to comment on mine?

TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/104809/A-Verse-of-Innocence/

on May. 7 2009 at 12:47 pm
Syann911 BRONZE, Miami, Florida
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I love this poem it is so REAL!

on May. 7 2009 at 1:50 am
ThreeDropsofVenom SILVER, Coventry, Rhode Island
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i Love this i hope to read much more!!

on May. 6 2009 at 10:51 pm
thedaydreamer13 BRONZE, Delta, Ohio
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i love it!! the poem had so much fealing... won-der-ful!!

hope to read more from this great author/poet!! :P hehe

E.Lee GOLD said...
on May. 6 2009 at 10:44 pm
E.Lee GOLD, Akron, Ohio
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i like it alot!

all too relateable.

great work

That One Guy said...
on May. 6 2009 at 1:11 pm
Hey don't worry because you will find the one person who will care for you. I was lonely and depressed once, then I found the girl of my dreams.

Krysta said...
on May. 6 2009 at 2:04 am
I really liked it. I hope to read more!<3

carijoy SILVER said...
on May. 6 2009 at 1:30 am
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments
Thank you all for your kind words, I really appreciate it. I love to write, and all that comes out is truly me.



Thank you all for reading, rating, commenting, and criticizing. :) In the end, it will all help me become a better writer.

on May. 5 2009 at 9:13 pm
dreamer112 GOLD, Burnsville, Minnesota
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I know how you feel. I'm glad you've made me feel like I'm not alone.

on May. 5 2009 at 1:40 pm
Solo_Artist09 BRONZE, St.louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"You can never cross the ocean unless you have the courage to lose sight of the shore." - Christopher Columbus "The most exhausting thing in life is being insincere." "Never apologize for showing feelings cause when you do you apologize for the truth"

i like this poem. i understand 100% i know how it fells to be in love even though i am young. and i know how it feels to have your heart broken and just wanting answers. its nothing wrong with that. no matter the age.

on May. 5 2009 at 1:18 pm
GreenWriter826 PLATINUM, McAllen, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
''Their fruits like honey to the throat
But poison in the blood'' - Christina Georgina Rossetti "Goblin Market"

this poem is undoubtfully different...i read it and think "no ryhmes or something that i've already heard"...i like that you make love something real but you still want it....good job

on May. 5 2009 at 6:54 am
Babydoll111 BRONZE, Forestville, Maryland
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i think your poem was great and flowed like crazy i like how ur not scared to express your true emotions

on May. 5 2009 at 1:17 am
bookhugger14 SILVER, Delta, Ohio
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O.M.G. that was a totally realistic, understandable, beautiful poem that i will never forget!!! thanks so much for writing it! i'm in love with it

on May. 5 2009 at 12:48 am
Callie Williams, Hagerstown, Maryland
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i love what you're saying. and i agree all the way. it's very good :D

on May. 3 2009 at 9:02 pm
xxChampagnexxPetalsxx BRONZE, Camano Island, Washington
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Wow, that's really intense. I know exactly how that feels. Especially about the silly, unrealistic romantic movies that you can't help but need to believe in. Because what else is there but hope? Real love is always better the Hollywood love though.

on May. 3 2009 at 5:40 pm
iSing_iWrite_iCreate BRONZE, White Post, Virginia
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Beautiful. I thought it was very powerful, and it really touched me.

Brooke M. said...
on May. 3 2009 at 1:22 am
your poem is really good


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