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See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?





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Zachary12220 said...
Jun. 8, 2009 at 3:45 pm
Me.
 
Callum A. said...
Jun. 5, 2009 at 10:21 am
I don't speak for everyone clearly in writing this, but in what way is this a poem as opposed to just gushing ideas onto paper? What ever happened to the concept of "Showing, not telling"? I feel that if your themes had been conveyed in metaphor, that would have been a more interesting poem. But this...I recommend you try and rework this poem into something more metaphorical. Perhaps surrounding a paticular moment you feel is crucial to the themes in this work?
 
Daniel C. said...
May 29, 2009 at 11:22 pm
wow this poem is absolutely beautiful, your an artist of emotions and words, you really expressed something in a genuine way.

And i really hope you will receive that love you desire
 
Ryan M. said...
May 29, 2009 at 10:26 pm
Epic. And so true
 
flower child said...
May 29, 2009 at 8:08 pm
I LOVE THIS POEM !!!
 
music said...
May 29, 2009 at 7:44 pm
wow i love this. it actually brings me to reality with love. i never ereally thought it that way. all tho it happens to me i jus kinda let everything go and keep trying. wow its really good!!!:P
 
lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 28, 2009 at 10:19 pm
wow! this is very good..i felt the emotion you put into this piece.very talented you are!..it should be published!! good job!! keep it up!!

~~~~~~~~please check out my work if you have time, thank you!
 
LMurf889 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 28, 2009 at 7:07 pm
I'm usually not a fan of the mushy, love poems. Something about them being a little cliche. But this one is fantastic. Totally changed my perspective of "love poems", it's so modern and kept my attention from start to finish.
 
Faeriedustygirl said...
May 27, 2009 at 6:31 am
I must say, its well put together, and I like how its not an ABAB rhyme scheme. Very mature, and i enjoyed it.

two thumbs up!
 
BrittanyB said...
May 22, 2009 at 7:00 pm
That's really good!! I hope to read more in the future!
 
KICK3593 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 21, 2009 at 9:15 pm
... :(
 
XostephybabayoX said...
May 20, 2009 at 9:04 pm
wow. this is really good =]
 
kaura G. said...
May 8, 2009 at 3:03 am
thats really good.
 
Ivette D. said...
May 8, 2009 at 2:33 am
really good, keep up the good work! :)
 
Batwoman said...
May 7, 2009 at 11:53 pm
I know exactly how you feel. I've been shot down by like every guy I've ever liked and it's hard. But I always get back up and try again even when I feel unlovable. So thanks for sharing something that hits so close to home for me and probably a lot of other people.
 
Amaranth said...
May 7, 2009 at 7:02 pm
This is really good, although the first sentence is a little cliche for my taste. It shows teen angst at its greatest. Very well written, nice use of free verse that jerks your emotions. Keep on writing.
Care to comment on mine?
TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/104809/A-Verse-of-Innocence/
 
Ieisha L. said...
May 7, 2009 at 12:47 pm
I love this poem it is so REAL!
 
writing4change said...
May 7, 2009 at 1:50 am
i Love this i hope to read much more!!
 
thedaydreamer13 said...
May 6, 2009 at 10:51 pm
i love it!! the poem had so much fealing... won-der-ful!!
hope to read more from this great author/poet!! :P hehe
 
<3::wish4wings::<3 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 6, 2009 at 10:44 pm
i like it alot!
all too relateable.
great work
 
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