Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments

See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?



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on Nov. 4 2009 at 5:54 pm
Precious13 BRONZE, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"The real you is who you are when no one is looking."

wow..this is really gud..some of mine will be posted soon!

on Nov. 3 2009 at 8:38 am
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato

wonderful article! I think people are pure genious to write a poem like that with no rhyme, but much rythm. plz comment and rate my poem called "Sensitive Am I" thankx

on Oct. 30 2009 at 10:40 am
riotgirl1134 PLATINUM, Albrightsville, Pennsylvania
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Wow that was really beautiful. I like it.

on Oct. 21 2009 at 6:53 pm
:) luv luv luv it!!!

cherishfaith said...
on Oct. 8 2009 at 11:28 am
obviosly her poem has potential if it was published.

JaseC GOLD said...
on Aug. 25 2009 at 6:06 am
JaseC GOLD, Granbury, Texas
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I think I already love you your words are so great (: anyways, your poems are fantastic and I think that you have one of the best poems I've ever read, and I have been studying it for my whole life.

carijoy SILVER said...
on Aug. 22 2009 at 6:56 am
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
8 articles 24 photos 51 comments
Thank you all for your kind words and encouragement. :)



To clear some things up:

This poem has nothing to do with suicide, haha. "Drowning in thoughts" means just what it says...

and if you would like to read something more structured, check out "Letting Go"

Thanks! :) cj

on Aug. 21 2009 at 5:23 pm
charlietheunicorn SILVER, Sandy, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Dont follow in my footseps.....I run into walls."

I love this poem because i can relate to it and you are so going as one of my favorites! Check out mine tell me what you think TeenInk.com/raw/Fiction/article/128729/I-hate-the-words-are-you-ok/

on Aug. 11 2009 at 2:39 am
Prosaic-Scriptor BRONZE, Davis, California
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I appreciate the idea of poetry for releasing thoughts and emotion, but this isn't really a poem, so much as a written stream of words with line breaks. Sure, I get that it's something a lot of people can relate to. Doesn't mean you should put it in the form of a poem.

I understand that some poets prefer the down to earth style. However, this needs something else. Flow, metaphors, similes, SOMETHING. Change it up. I'm not quite feeling the poetic potential.

on Aug. 4 2009 at 4:36 am
delizabethl PLATINUM, Linesville, Pennsylvania
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You go girl!

Lonleydandy said...
on Aug. 4 2009 at 1:24 am
O my gosh, I LOVE this poem. It is soooo easy to relate to! I love how you shoved the concept of pain of love into a short poem like this. Amazing job!

on Aug. 4 2009 at 1:17 am
poetic_natural GOLD, Jefferson, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"you know you're in love because you can't fall asleep, because reality is finally better than your dreams"

you dont know how easy for me it is to relate to this poem, but it is beautiful and keep on writing

on Aug. 3 2009 at 11:03 pm
Lynzee Johnson BRONZE, Cochran, Georgia
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great job.... it is so easy to relate to. i really enjoyed it!!

bravo!!

on Aug. 3 2009 at 10:08 pm
pinksage33 BRONZE, Woodstock, New York
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This is good!!!

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on Jul. 29 2009 at 10:42 pm
Zero_K DIAMOND, Moosic, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's no fun if you're not insane, otherwise you grow up to be an accountant." -Moi

I love this and I can soooo relate. Every time I get a crush on a guy I get all depressed and think he doesn't like me because I'm ugly or I'm fat or I'm stupid and then when I finally found a guy and it was the stupidest relationship ever. I really love this poem. BRAVO!

ZERO

on Jul. 25 2009 at 3:09 am
GigglyAmbar SILVER, Washington, District Of Columbia
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I love this poem, You took the words right away from my heart. I feel the exact same way. Great Job

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on Jul. 13 2009 at 4:18 am
Anjo! SILVER, Roseburg, Oregon
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holy cow! it took my a while to get to the bottom of the page just to write you a comment! well obviously ... you are an amazing writer.. this is awesome. =]

on Jul. 13 2009 at 3:52 am
PinkPrincess GOLD, Wellington, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
I think therefore I am

wow i feel like you know me and what im going through very relatable

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on Jul. 13 2009 at 1:43 am
LIKEwhoaa GOLD, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
The important thing is this: To be able at any moment to sacrifice what we are for what we could become.
-Charles DuBois

wow this is super deep, i love how it completely defies the cliche love poem of love at first sight blah blah blah...it really is more like reality. and the rhyme scheme is genius:) keep it up! ohh and check out my work:)

on Jul. 13 2009 at 1:02 am
xXFadedFlowerXx GOLD, Roy, Utah
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I love your poem, I've felt this way countless times.


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