Need Love?

December 31, 2008
By carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
carijoy SILVER, Phoenix, Arizona
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See it but never feel it.
Get close, only to push it away.
“Don’t know what you’ve got til it’s gone”
Epitome of my life.
What is wrong with me?
What makes me so un-lovable?
Can someone remove this defective sign from my forehead,
And replace it with a kiss.
I want more than mediocre.
I want someone to miss.
Do I ask for too much?
Are my requirements unachievable?
My heart remains unconquered, unattained.
I’m tired of fairy tale endings,
Silly thoughts put in my head by unrealistic, but hopelessly believable movies.
They are all the same.
Girl meets boy. Girl messes it up. Boy forgives girl.
Happily Ever After.
At least they let on that relationships have problems.
I want raw, unrelenting love.
The real deal.
No movie, novel, or episode of “Sex and the City” could ever touch.
Left alone, drowning in thoughts,
Who else in the world could need love,
Like I need love?



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Mia7789 said...
on Feb. 18 2016 at 10:56 am
This is really nice. I think it is well written.

on Feb. 12 2016 at 5:01 pm
IndigoWaltz PLATINUM, Newport Beach, California
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Favorite Quote:
"A witty quote proves nothing"
-Voltaire

Needs a lot of improvement. Although the message is alright, it is still generic.

on Feb. 4 2016 at 7:20 pm
IndigoWaltz PLATINUM, Newport Beach, California
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Favorite Quote:
"A witty quote proves nothing"
-Voltaire

Check me out some feedback would mean the world to me.

on Feb. 4 2016 at 7:17 pm
IndigoWaltz PLATINUM, Newport Beach, California
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Favorite Quote:
"A witty quote proves nothing"
-Voltaire

Need Improvement

on Dec. 17 2015 at 8:36 am
MidnightStorm225, Bellefontaine, Ohio
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hit me in the feels

on Nov. 19 2015 at 2:34 pm
DemiRose70510 BRONZE, Newport, Other
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Love it. So relatable

on Nov. 10 2015 at 1:11 pm
tayfreeman. GOLD, Chesapeake, Virginia
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I, like many others probably, can relate to this poem so well! And i think that's what makes it great- personal with a strong message but, at the same time, very relatable to readers.

WolfLuver said...
on Nov. 10 2015 at 12:35 pm
I like this it reminds me so much of me and my life

on Nov. 6 2015 at 9:21 am
cartierthefoamposite,
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Love is a very strong drug of life. This is a true writing of what love can do to two individuals, which is a reason why I love this poem.

on Nov. 4 2015 at 2:37 pm
Queenjonah BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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This poem is honestly what I feel about love and being in love. When you say, “I want raw, unrelenting love,” I feel deep inside of my heart what you mean. I understand what is written on an emotional level when it comes to meaning behind the poem. I am in awe with the honesty and emotion that you have put into your work.

on Nov. 4 2015 at 9:58 am
2cmakayla BRONZE, Apple, Louisiana
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Many teens, including myself, feel as if they can never be loved. “What is wrong with me? What makes me so un-lovable?” are questions that are asked everyday. The poem speaks to me because love is complex; it can be heartbreaking and wonderful all at the same time. I have experienced love, but “I want raw, unrelenting love. The real deal.”

loula said...
on Nov. 2 2015 at 10:50 am
loula,
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Favorite Quote:
move foward like you mean it , cause you wont fail

beautiful darling. outstanding!

on Sep. 14 2015 at 10:27 am
Darius_Nobles GOLD, San Angelo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
'Today you are you, and that's truer than true. There's no one alive that's youer than you." Dr. Seuss

TeenInk.com/users/Darius_Nobles Please Leave Constructive Criticism, There's always room for improvement. Thanks Enjoy.

DLove BRONZE said...
on Jul. 23 2015 at 5:19 pm
DLove BRONZE, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about how good it is, but how good you make it

Love it. described me in every word

on Jul. 22 2015 at 5:29 am
Brin_Santokumura SILVER, Arlington, Texas
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This poem is pretty sad but beautiful. Please continue to write amazing poems like this one!

on Jun. 9 2015 at 7:38 pm
elisam14 BRONZE, Montville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't stress the could haves, if it should have, it would have."

Love this, can relate.

on Apr. 2 2015 at 2:17 pm
peystallings BRONZE, Grandville, Michigan
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This is a really good poem, nice word choice! Love it

on Mar. 19 2015 at 5:56 am
Iamwhoiam17 GOLD, Lake City Fl, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Just be yourself,if you are happy that's all that matter's.

I really love the way it was written! :) Great job!

on Feb. 20 2015 at 9:51 pm
Gabbyyirene GOLD, Winter Garden, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
You have every right to a beautiful life- Selena Gomez

This is a very interesting and lovely poem! Great job and keep it up(:

on Feb. 19 2015 at 9:43 pm
TakeAGuessKatara SILVER, Beltsville, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"Live for tomorrow, remember today, and smile because you survived yesterday," by Me

An interesting view on love.




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