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I know, it’s considered
A cliché type of thing
To make a rose
A symbol for love

But I always thought
That’s just it
A beautiful thing
So powerful
So minute
One concept
Captured
In one object

It has many layers
Roots
A foundation
Depth
Purity
Beauty
Simple
Yet
Convoluted

It has thorns
Of course
There are negatives
All you want
Is to capture
To hold
That one small
Object
So delicate

You take it
In your hands
And then you see
You feel
For the first time
And the second
And the third
Always
It will hurt you
You will bleed

And maybe
Maybe you’ll learn
Maybe you’ll hold it
Carefully
Next time

But always
Every time
You’ll feel the thorns
You’ll see the beauty
You’ll have it in your hands
But it will hurt you

However
If you care enough
If you want it
Enough
You won’t mind
The thorns



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EdytD said...
Mar. 25, 2009 at 10:54 pm:
i like how you say it's a cliche, but still manage to write an original poem talking about the cliche - it definitely doesn't seem easy! i don't think it's long at all; i like the descriptive words - definitely my style! i also like the repetition to emphasize the points. good job! if you want to check out my poem, the link is: TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/91407/A-Lonely-Rain/. thanks, and keep it up! :D
 
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yael K. said...
Mar. 25, 2009 at 2:08 am:
yaa well this was good but...its still a cliche! everything you wrote about it was still cliche! plus a little repetitive, not all around my favorite poem
 
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justmeonlyme said...
Mar. 25, 2009 at 2:01 am:
that is amazing so much on one topic.i love it!
 
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Lilly said...
Mar. 23, 2009 at 5:01 pm:
I like ur proem it's wonderful!!!!
 
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Jessika G. said...
Mar. 19, 2009 at 11:03 pm:
mint. this peaice of work was outstanding. enough said.
 
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lena_monrose said...
Mar. 16, 2009 at 5:37 pm:
amazing. I like the imagery. 5 stars:)
 
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peace said...
Feb. 25, 2009 at 12:43 am:
i really liked how you took a common symbol and gave it a fresh new look. great job =]
 
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FallenPoet89 said...
Feb. 24, 2009 at 2:53 am:
Good writing makes you think, I like that about a poem , keep on writing gurl-
 
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Monica B. said...
Feb. 23, 2009 at 4:20 am:
Really a gorgeous poem. I love the concept. I find the end a bit long but editing it would probably loose it's beauty.
 
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Alexxxandra77 said...
Feb. 23, 2009 at 3:22 am:
i love love love love this poem.
its so true.
great work!!
 
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writingis4ever said...
Feb. 19, 2009 at 4:58 am:
great poem! i loved it!
 
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Katherine F. said...
Feb. 19, 2009 at 4:27 am:
Absolutely, without doubt, this is the most strikingly beautiful poem I've read in a long time.
 
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NIsha S. said...
Feb. 19, 2009 at 12:58 am:
before reading this poem, i was not fond of roses in any way because they were sucha cliche, but you opened my eyes to seeing them in an entirely different way. thank you, and your poem is great;)
 
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mickey123 said...
Feb. 13, 2009 at 3:33 pm:
i really luved this poem it getz me i get it dont give up on ur excelent writing keep it up u do a great job wit poetry
 
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thatguyyouthinkyouknow said...
Feb. 11, 2009 at 7:22 pm:
that was really interesting... I couldn't stop reading it untill I was completely finished.
 
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maybetomorrow said...
Jan. 24, 2009 at 2:52 pm:
this is awesome, i love cliches !
 
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xxJustxxme said...
Jan. 10, 2009 at 9:35 pm:
i thought it was a cliche before reading your poem. But now I think your totally right. I love the way you put this. it's a great poem =D
 
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